一废话为题作文

篇一：作文写很多都是废话,该怎样写才好？

王冉慧 同学：

你好，你本次的问题是作文写很多都是废话，该怎样写才好？

其实，你问这个问题，说明你作文很有的写，这已经很好了。要知道，作文最怕的就是无从下笔，不知该写些什么，有的同学写到一半发现写不下去了，这种情况很多。老师很高兴你有很多内容可以写。只是你可能在选材方面有所困惑，害怕写出的文章杂乱而没重点，没文采，不知老师对你的理解对不？

针对你的这种情况，老师有两个建议要给你：

首先，关于选材。清人袁枚在《随园诗话》中写道：“蚕食桑而所吐者丝也，非桑也；蜂采花，而所酿者蜜也，非花也。”此话语虽然普通至极，但仔细品味，却会使人想起一个问题来：蜜蜂能在众多的花粉中酿出蜂蜜来，那么，我们在众多的材料面前怎样去选择材料，写出佳作来呢？我认为，我们在写作时，应像蜜蜂那样勤于博采，占有一定数量的材料，并善于精取，提取精华，从而写出具有新意味的佳作来。 一，勤于博采，解决“无米下锅”的危机。这里又有提到关于平时积累的问题。二，注重新颖妥贴，避免陈旧乏味。在选择材料时要做到新颖妥贴，避免陈旧乏味。三，力求离奇巧妙，引人注目。在应试写作中，最为引人注目的却是那些无人涉足的新奇材料。

其次，关于语言。语言(转载于:www.smhaida.com 海 达 范 文网:一废话为题作文)太平淡，写的多有道理可能阅卷老师都不爱看，语言的应用是写作的脸面，一定要写的吸引人。我们要的是生动。何谓生动？生即鲜活，动即灵动。也就是说语言至少要给人一种感觉——陌生感。这是由大脑机能“自主化”这一特征所决定的。陌生的信息输入大脑，大脑进行的“自主化”加工就更富有挑战性，自然也就更易获得快感。因此，我们的文字应给读者大脑输入新鲜信息。这也需要平时的一些积累和练笔，老师相信你会做好的！

最后祝你的作文能够越写越好，能够妙笔生花！期待你的好消息！

篇二：作文废话模版及例子集

作文废话模版及例子集（转贴）

Issue 模版

The issue of whether... is a complex and controversial one. On the one hand, many people may feel that..; on the other hand, others may think that…

However, in the final analysis, I conclude that …. In the following discussion, I would like to present evidences favoring the former one and refuting the latter one/to support my point of view.

--- In the first place, the most important reason for my view is that 。For example/History has it that 例子 There is no better example than this to illustrate the strength /weakness of 某方.

--- In addition, there is another reason for me to choose this statement/consider this statement to be wrong. The reason is not far to seek:原因2。For instance, 例子2。

--- Of course, it may be true that自己观点对立方的某些长处 in some conditions . However, this alone does not constitute a sufficient support to 对立方的观点。,When the advantage and disadvantage of X and Y are carefully compared, the most striking conclusion is obvious.

Given the reasons discussed above, which sometimes intertwine to form an organic whole and thus become more persuasive, we may safely arrive at the conclusion that XXX

例子集

Success

Bill Gates

When Bill Gates made his decision to drop out from Harvard, he did not care too much of the result. Gates entered Harvard in 1973, and dropped out two years later when he and Allen started the engine of Microsoft. Many people did not understand why Gates gave up such a good opportunity to study in the world’s No.1 University. However, with size comes power, Microsoft dominates the PC market with its operating systems, such as MS-DOS and Windows. Now, Microsoft becomes the biggest software company in the world and Bill Gates becomes the richest man in the world.

We can learn from the experience of the great inventor Thomas Alva Edison that sometimes a series of apparent failures is really a precursor to success. The voluminous personal papers of Edison reveal that his inventions typically did not spring to life in a flash of inspiration but evolved slowly from previous woks.

Mother Teresa

Mother Teresa, winner of the Nobel Peace Prize, dedicated the majority of her life to helping the poorest of the poor in India, thus gaining her the name "Saint of the Gutters." The devotion towards the poor won her respect throughout the world and the Nobel Peace Prize in 1979. She founded an order of nuns called the Missionaries of Charity in Calcutta, India dedicated to serving the poor. Almost 50 years later, the Missionaries of Charity have grown from 12 sisters in India to over 3,000 in 517 missions throughout 100 countries worldwide.

Lady Diana Spencer, Princess of Whales, is remembered and respected by people all over the world more for her beauty, kindness, humanity and charitable activities than for her technical skills.

Mandela

Mandela, the South African black political leader and former president, was awarded 1993 Nobel Peace Prize for his efforts to antiracism and antiapartheid. Nelson Mandela is one of the great moral and political leaders of our time: an international hero whose lifelong dedication to the fight against racial oppression in South Africa won him the Nobel Peace Prize and the presidency of his country. Since his triumphant release in 1990 from more than a quarter-century of imprisonment, Mandela has been at the centre of the most compelling and inspiring political drama in the world. As president of the African National Congress and head of South Africa's antiapartheid movement, he was instrumental in moving the nation toward multiracial government and majority rule. He is revered everywhere as a vital force in the fight for human rights and racial equality.

Beethoven

Beethoven, the German Composer, began to lose his hearing in 1801 and was entirely deaf by 1819. However, this obstacle could not keep him from becoming one of the most famous and prolific composers in art history. His music, including 9 symphonies, 5 piano concertos, several senates and so on, formes a transition from classical to romantic composition.

Individual, Companies,Leadership and Internal control

Mr. Lesson was accused of losing 1.3 billon dollars as a result of a risky derivative investment with the potential of a 27-billon gain. The collapse of Barings Bank in 1995 has been one of the most spectacular events in the banking world in recent years. Banks solvency and liquidity can be significantly threatened if speculative trading in financial derivatives is guided by a lack of adequate internal and external controls. There is evidence that such reasons are responsible for the failure of Barings in February 1995.

Recently, many multi-national companies, such as Cisco and Yahoo, stimulate the employees’ morale by offering stock options to their employees. Stock option provides a chance for employees to become the shareholders of the company. As the result, the interest and profit of the company is tightly connected with the employees’ interest and income.

Many firms adopt “Profit-Related-Pay” contracts (PRP contracts) and pay wages at levels that vary with firms’ profits. Many studies suggest that firms adopting PRP contracts show productivity per worker higher than that of their competitors who used more traditional contracts. The reason behind is that PRP contracts greatly change individual workers’ relationships to the firm, connecting their interest with firms’ interest.

The greater the division of labor in an economy, the greater the need for communication and coordination. This is because increased division of labor entails a larger number of specialized producers, which results in a greater number of disruptions of supply and production.

An employer looking for long-term employees may be better served by hiring applicants with broad background. By way of their more general education, these applicants have acquired a variety of general and transferable skills. They may be more suitable than their business-background colleagues to solve

general management problems, deal with business associates from different cultures and view issues at a variety of aspects. In general, the employees with broad background can accustom to changes more quickly than their business-majored colleagues.

Daimler Chrysler, one of the most successful automobile companies in the world, contributes significantly to the local employment of Stuttgart, Germany.

Philip Morris, the largest tobacco company in the world, has been sued by government and many other groups for producing products that are harmful to health. The fines and legal fees that have resulted from the legal attacks against the company have costed the company substantial amounts of money.

Bayer, one of the largest pharmaceutic companies in the world, announced that the company would cease production of one of its major products, because of the hazardous ingredients it contained. By doing so, the company suffers great loss on profitability, but gains strong public support and understanding, which can contribute to the long-term success of the company.

Mitsubishi Motors had concealed significant defects in the break system of Pajero, one of the company’s major products, before apologized to public. Hundreds of car accidents were directly caused by the break error. Thus, the company suffered a great goods return, losing not only the market share but also the confidence of consumers.

Henry Ford’s factory was so efficient that by 1926 a new “model-T” cost only $310, one-third the price of the original 1908 model.

Discriminating services may cause misunderstanding and unpleasant result. The best example is Toshiba, one of the largest Japanese companies. In 2000, the Company announced that among notebook computers it produced, one model had serious defect. Users in North America could choose either replacements with an upgraded model or full refund. However, no such offer for users in China. Chinese users were outrage at the company’s discrimination and refused to use any of Toshiba’s notebook computers. What the company lost is not only the temporary revenue but also the consumer’s confidence, which contribute to the long-term success of the company.

Compared with government officers, private corporation managers must pay more attention to efficiency and effectiveness of their decisions. Normally, maximizing profitability is not the primary goal of government owned enterprises and governmental planning, so that many unrealistic decisions may be resulted. It is the hidden reason that many government owned enterprises become profitable after the privatisations.

Traditionally, the first firm to commercialise a new technology has benefited from unique opportunity to shape product definitions, forcing followers to adapt to a standard or invest in an unproven alternative. Today, however, the largest payoffs may go to companies that lead in developing integrated approaches for successful mass production and distribution. For example, SEGA, producer of Saturn, was the first company to develop home video game machine commercially, but Sony Entertainment INC., producer of Play Station, proved to be more successful at forming strategic alliance with other producers and

distributors to manufacture and market its hardware and software. Because consumers had more choices on Play Station’s games, they seldom bought SEGA Saturn. By the end of the 1990’s, Play Station dominated the home video game market while SEGA Saturn was no longer in production.

The financial crash of October 1987 and the Asia Economic Crisis in 1998 demonstrate that the world’s capital markets are more closely integrated than ever before and that events in one part of the global village may be transmitted to the rest of the village—almost instantaneously.

The fact that in many corporations employees are being replaced by automated equipment in order to save money does not mean our lives are becoming worse. After all, it is the automation that boosts the industrial revolution, which in turn, creates thousands of hundreds more positions than in the past. If the corporations cannot improve its profitability, many more people will lost their jobs ultimately.

As the economic role of multinational, global corporations expands, the international economic environment will be shaped increasingly not by governments or international institutions, but by the interaction between governments and global corporations.

Traditionally, people think that companies are set up for making profit, not for saving our planet. Today, however, more and more multinational companies adopt the Corporate Social Responsibility Policy (CSR policy). These companies pay more attention to the social problems, from employee minimum wage to environment issues. On the one hand, these companies do not want people to protest in front of the office buildings; on the other hand, a good public image does help the companies promote their products to consumers.

The interview is an essential part of a successful firing program because with it, job applicants who have personalities that are unsuited to the requirements of the job will be eliminated from consideration.

Architecture

The Potala Palace is Tibet’s cardinal landmark and a structure that deserves a place as one of the wonders of eastern architecture. The Potala palace was built by Songtsen Gampo, the first king of Tibet, in the 7th century. The roof and many other parts of the Palace were decorated by pure gold, which was contributed by the Buddhist in Tibet. Since its construction, the Potala Palace has been the home of each successive Dalai Lamas, the religious leader of Tibet. This building dedicates not only to religious belief but also to the accommodation place—over a thousand Lamas live in it today. Shaped by the people of Tibet, the Potala Palace has a far-reaching influence on the Tibetan’s religion as well as every day lives.

Besides religious impact, buildings represent our intellectual and business behavior. Take Bank of China Tower as an example. It is located at No. 1 Garden Road, central Hong Kong. The tower itself is 315 meters high, and the unique style and spectacular appearance has made it one of the most distinguished buildings in the world. The BOC tower is a masterpiece of the world famous American-Chinese architect Mr. I.M.Pei. The inspiration of the design is derived from the elegant poise of bamboo. Now, the BOC tower is a symbolic of strength, vitality and growth, representing also the Bank’s commitment to the rapid development of Hong Kong and to servicing the community. The BOC tower has not only recorded a

glorious page in the construction history of Hong Kong but also highlighted the new phases of expansion in Hong Kong.

Constructed in the Victory Age, the Big Bell is now the biggest bell in the world and is still one of the important parts of the English lives.

Energy

OPEC is one of the best examples. OPEC, the Organization of Petroleum Exporting Countries, is an international organization of eleven developing countries that are heavily reliant on oil revenues as their main source of income. Since oil revenues are so vital for the economic development of these nations, they aim to bring stability and harmony to the oil market by adjusting their oil output to help ensure a balance between supply and demand. In the long run, the stabilized out-put help to cease the problem of over-refining and over utilization of oil energy.

Nowadays, developed countries already masters the technology of using more efficiency and economical energy resources, such as water and solar energy, while the traditional and wasted energy still dominates in the developing countries. International cooperation enables the technology transfer between developed countries and developing countries and devotes to the benefit of entire human beings. A worldwide leader can speed up the decision-making progress and enhance the solidarity among the member countries.

Children

The immaturity of young children may deter them from making moral discrimination about harmful actions committed against or others. Many scientific research prove that young children do not take into account the intentions of a person committing accidental or deliberate harm and that it is difficult for young children to differentiate between unforeseeable and foreseeable, and thus preventable harm.

Television programs and movies that depict violence among teenagers are extremely popular. Given how influential these media are, we have good reason to believe that these depictions cause young people to engage in violent behavior. Hence, depictions of violence among teenagers should be prohibited from movies and television programs, if only in those programs and movies promoted to young audiences.

Others

It took Columbus, the Italian explorer in the service of Spain who determined that the earth is round, over 3 months to sail from Europe to America. However, we can do so by air within one day.

Rabbi Meir, a second-century scholar, admonished his disciples to look not at the pitcher but as its contents because, he stated “Many a new pitcher has been found to be full of old wine.” This was his way of emphasizing the importance of the distinction between form and idea, and of stressing that the integrity of an idea is more important than the form of its expression.

Old sayings

篇三：常州市2006年中考优秀作文(含点评)请以“告别------”为题写一篇文章

常州市2006年中考优秀作文（含点评）

请以“告别 ------ ”为题写一篇文章。

要求：①将题目补充完整；②文体不限（若写诗歌则不少于25行）；③要有自己的体验和感悟，不得抄袭；④不少于550字；⑤文中不能出现真实的校名和人名。

告 别 英 雄

峰峦如聚，波涛如怒，华夏大地英雄路，望古今，意涩苦，伤心忠烈悲入土，多少英雄都作了古。 汨罗江上，阴风怒号，浊浪排空，日星隐耀，山岳潜行。江畔，身着华丽的儒者，顶着风，灌着酒，他为奸臣的排挤而不满，他为楚王的昏庸而失望，他为楚国的灭亡而悲愤，他为自己的无能而羞愧。于是，纵身跳入滔滔江水中，狂风扯着他的衣裳，想留住这忠义之士，可是他失败了。他想以死来唤醒国君，国民，国家，可是他也失败了。呜呼，忠臣兮，壮士兮，你走了，你精神长存，端午我会向你致敬。

同样时间，同样为国，同样在水边，同样义无反顾。怀藏利刃，背向大风，吟着“风萧萧兮易水寒，壮士一去兮不复还”的千古名句，向朋友泪别。酒罢风起，送着这位一去不返的豪杰烈士，风呜咽了，卷起沙尘以泻心里的愤怒，壮士身影渐渐没入风沙之中。呜呼，烈士兮，义士兮，你走了，你不屈长在，易水旁会有一束我为你插的白菊。劈华雄，斗吕布，斩颜良，诛文丑，何等威武；千里走单骑，过五关，斩六将，何等忠义；单刀赴宴，水淹七军，何等智勇；刮骨疗伤，败走麦城，何等凄凉。你是中华不屈的儿女！悲壮兮，感慨兮，泪沾裳，桃园中，我将种下一株桃树，领略引导你走向辉煌，走向死亡的点点滴滴。

滚滚长江东逝水，浪花淘尽英雄泪，成败是非转头空，青山依旧，几度夕阳红。舔，英雄血，听，英雄吟，颂，英雄赋，尝，英雄泪，感，英雄情。英雄们，历史仍在发展，华夏正在强大，你们安心走吧……

点评：

这是一篇视野开阔，立意高远，文采飞扬的散文，从中可看出作者熟读文史的底蕴，驾驭语言的能力以及善于独立思考的个性。作者构思新奇，选材独特，开篇不俗，巧妙化用古诗词，意韵深远隽永，语言苍劲有力，词汇丰富多彩，文笔流畅感人，多处运用排比句式，增加了文章的气势，情感细腻真切，讴歌了英雄之壮美，蕴含着发人深省的主题，读来有一种诗的韵味，富有激情和感染力。

篇四：【新东方】六级作文分题型模版、段落讲解和万用废话

辩论式议论文模版（一）

Some people believe (argue, recognize, think)that

观点1. But other people take an opposite side. They firmly believe that

观点2. As for me, I agree to the former/latter idea. There are a dozenof reasons behind my belief. First of all,

论据1. More importantly,

论据2. Most important of all,

论据3. In summary, 总结观点。 As a college student, I am supposed to 表决心。或From above, we can predict that预测。

辩论式议论文模版（二）

People hold different views about X. Some people are of the opinionthat 观点1. While others point out that

观点2. As far as I am concerned, the former/latter opinion holds moreweight. For one thing,

论据1. For another,

论据2. Last but not the least,

论据3. To conclude, 总结观点. As a college student, I am supposed to 表决心。或From above, we can predict that预测。

提纲式作文写作模板

1、对立观点式

A. 有人认为X 是好事，赞成X，为什么？

B. 有人认为X 是坏事，反对X，为什么？

C. 我的看法。

Some people are in favor of the idea of doing X. They point out thefact that 支持X 的第一个原因。They also argue that 支持X 的另一个原因。However, other people stand on a different ground. They consider itharmful to do X. They firmly point out that 反对X 的第一个理由。 Anexample can give the details of this argument: There is some truth in botharguments. But I think the advantages of X overweigh the

disadvantages. Inaddition to the above-mentioned negative effects it might bring about, X alsomay X 的有一个坏处。

2、批驳观点式

A．一个错误观点。

B．我不同意。Manypeople argue that 错误观点。By saying that, they mean 对这个观点的进一步解释。An example they have presented is that 一个例子。(According to a surveyperformed by X on a group of Y, almost 80% of them 赞成这个错误观点或者受到这个错误观点的影响)。 There might be some element oftruth in these people’s belief. But if we consider it in depth, we will feel noreservation to conclude that 与错误观点相反的观点。There are a number of reasons behind my belief. (以下参照辩论文的议论文写法)。3、社会问题(现象)式

A．一个社会问题或者现象

B．产生的原因

C．对社会和我们生活的影响

D．如何杜绝。(如果是问题的话)

E．前景的预测。

Nowadays, there exists an increasingly serioussocial/economic/environmental problem. (X has increasingly become a commonconcern of the public). According to a survey, 调查内容说明这种现象的情况。(或者是一个例子)。 There are a couple of reasonsbooming this problem/phenomenon.下面参照辩论式议论文写法。 X has caused substantial impact on the society and our daily life,which has been articulated in the following aspects. 参照辩论式议论文的写法。 A dozen of measures aresupposed to take to prevent X from bringing us more harm. 同上Based on the above discussions, Ican easily forecast that more and more people will??

图表类作文写作模板

It is obvious inthe graphic/table that the rate/number/amount of Y has undergone dramaticchanges. It has gone up/grown/fallen/dropped considerably in recent years (as Xvaries). At the point of X1, Y reaches its peak value of??(多少). What is

the reason for this change? Mainly there are?? (多少)reasons behind the situation reflected in the graphic/table. Firstof all,??(第一个原因). More

importantly,??(第二个原因). Most important of all,??(第三个原因). Fromthe above discussions, we have enough reason to predict what will happen in thenear future. The trend described in the graphic/table will continue for quite along time (if necessary measures are not taken括号里的使用于那些不太好的变化趋势).

说明原因型模块

These dayswe often hear that (1).It is common that (2). Why does such

circumstance occurin spite of social protects? For one thing, (3).For another, (4). What is more,since

(5),it isnatural that (6).To solve the problem is not easy at all, but is worth trying.We should do something such as (7) to improve he present situation, and I dobelieve everything will be better in the future.

注释：

1、提出论题

2、说明现状

3、理由一

4、理由二

5、理由三

6、理由三引起的后果

观点论证型作文模板 1.模板一

1. It is true that——.

2. However,——.

3.I think——.

4.—— can be listed as follow. 1．提出普遍存在地观点。 2．谈不同地观点。 3．自己地观点，即文章地论点 4．过度句，转折到观点地论证，由题目选择

具体的词。

5. First of all, ——

6. Secondly ——7.For example—— 5．论证理由一

8.Thirdly,——

9. A case in point is ——. 6．论证理由二。 7．举例具体说明理由二。

8. 论证理由三。

10.It goes without saying that—— 9. 举例说明理由三。

11.There is no doubt that ——

12.In conclusion —— 10. 提出执行该观点时应注意的事项。

11. 得出结论。

12. 总结全文。 2．模板二

1. Some people believe that——.

2. The truth is deep andprofound.

3. As we know,——.

4. In addition,——. 1．直接提出本文的观点。 2．进一步强度观点的正确性。 3．论证理由一 4．论证理由二

5．承上启下。

6．举例一具体论证。

7．总结例一。8. 举例二具体论证。

9. 举例三具体论证。 5. There are numerous examples —— 6. A case in point is—— 7.There is close to suggest—— 8.For another example——

9.Moreover,——. 10. 总结上下，重申论点。

11. 指出该论点应注意什么。 10.All mentioned above tell us——

12. 总结全文。 11.But one thing we have tonotice is

that ——

12.In a word, ——

问题解决型作文模板

1.模板一

1. With thedevelopment/improvement of 1．空格一处铺垫，空格二处填写某一问题。 ——,——.

2. It is necessary that——.

3. On the one hand, ——.

4. On the other hand, ——

5．承上启下，填要解决的问题。

5. Therefore, how to —— is worthpaying 6. 解决办法一。

attention.

6.Firstly——7.Secondly—— 7 解决办法二。 8. 举例解释解决办法二。 2．关注解决现象引出的问题很必要。 3．解决问题很必要的理由一。 4．解决问题很必要的理由二。

8.For example,——9. Thirdly, ——. 9. 解决办法三。

10.In other words,—— 10. 阐明解决办法三。

11.In fact, ways to —— arecountless. 11. 指出解决问题的办法多种多样。

12.It’s time that ——

2.模板二

1. There has been a discussionrecently 1．提出现存的问题。

abouot——.

2. It is obvious that——.

3. Additionally, ——.

4. So it is high time, ——

5．解决办法一

5. First of all, —— 6．解决办法一的理由.。 2．解决问题很必要的理由一 3．解决问题很必要的理由二。 4．承上启下，说明解决问题的必要性。 12. 强调解决问题时不可待。

6.The reason is——7.Secondly—— 7．解决办法二。

8.That is to say,——

9. Thirdly, ——. 8. 阐明解决办法二。 9. 解决办法三。

10.In fact, more than three wayscan be 10. 指出解决问题的办法多种多样。 adopted,——

11.As for me, —— 11. 小结解决问题的根本途径。 12. 总结全文。

篇五：常州市2006年中考优秀作文(含点评)请以“告别------”为题写一篇文章

常州市2006年中考优秀作文（含点评）

请以“告别 ------ ”为题写一篇文章。

要求：①将题目补充完整；②文体不限（若写诗歌则不少于25行）；③要有自己的体验和感悟，不得抄袭；④不少于550字；⑤文中不能出现真实的校名和人名。

告 别 英 雄

峰峦如聚，波涛如怒，华夏大地英雄路，望古今，意涩苦，伤心忠烈悲入土，多少英雄都作了古。 汨罗江上，阴风怒号，浊浪排空，日星隐耀，山岳潜行。江畔，身着华丽的儒者，顶着风，灌着酒，他为奸臣的排挤而不满，他为楚王的昏庸而失望，他为楚国的灭亡而悲愤，他为自己的无能而羞愧。于是，纵身跳入滔滔江水中，狂风扯着他的衣裳，想留住这忠义之士，可是他失败了。他想以死来唤醒国君，国民，国家，可是他也失败了。呜呼，忠臣兮，壮士兮，你走了，你精神长存，端午我会向你致敬。

同样时间，同样为国，同样在水边，同样义无反顾。怀藏利刃，背向大风，吟着“风萧萧兮易水寒，壮士一去兮不复还”的千古名句，向朋友泪别。酒罢风起，送着这位一去不返的豪杰烈士，风呜咽了，卷起沙尘以泻心里的愤怒，壮士身影渐渐没入风沙之中。呜呼，烈士兮，义士兮，你走了，你不屈长在，易水旁会有一束我为你插的白菊。劈华雄，斗吕布，斩颜良，诛文丑，何等威武；千里走单骑，过五关，斩六将，何等忠义；单刀赴宴，水淹七军，何等智勇；刮骨疗伤，败走麦城，何等凄凉。你是中华不屈的儿女！悲壮兮，感慨兮，泪沾裳，桃园中，我将种下一株桃树，领略引导你走向辉煌，走向死亡的点点滴滴。

滚滚长江东逝水，浪花淘尽英雄泪，成败是非转头空，青山依旧，几度夕阳红。舔，英雄血，听，英雄吟，颂，英雄赋，尝，英雄泪，感，英雄情。英雄们，历史仍在发展，华夏正在强大，你们安心走吧……

点评：

这是一篇视野开阔，立意高远，文采飞扬的散文，从中可看出作者熟读文史的底蕴，驾驭语言的能力以及善于独立思考的个性。作者构思新奇，选材独特，开篇不俗，巧妙化用古诗词，意韵深远隽永，语言苍劲有力，词汇丰富多彩，文笔流畅感人，多处运用排比句式，增加了文章的气势，情感细腻真切，讴歌了英雄之壮美，蕴含着发人深省的主题，读来有一种诗的韵味，富有激情和感染力。

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