作业帮我怕打针630字作文
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篇一：《新希望》作文630字
新希望
每一天，我们都要以新的状态面对生活，面对新的一天，新学期是新的开始，新的希望，我们要以崭新的面貌迎接新的未来，让我们的学习生活多姿多彩，有滋有味。
首先是学习方面，在这新学期里,我要加强自己不擅长的科目,在语文上要注意课内外知识的结合，提高自己的阅读、写作能力,不能只想课内不管课外了。数学,不能只明白课本上的习题应该怎么做就够了,必须在课外再花一些时间来钻研和多做一些练习。上课仔细听讲,弄懂每一个问题,作业及时完成,追求质量和速度,下课后做好预习、复习工作。英语上，早晚多背一些单词,提高英语各方面的水平。从良好的基础上向着更高的目标出发。
其次，学习和道德是紧密联系的。我认为我们之所以要读书，就是要做一个对社会有用的人，如果光有一肚子的知识，而这些东西不是用在正途上的，那将来的路是充满黑暗的，可能前面就是陡峭的悬崖，若一不留神，就可能随时跌入万丈深渊，害人又害己。而只有道德没有灵活头脑的人，没关系，只要认真学习，认真思考，把书读的透彻一点，笨鸟先飞，相信一定会有辉煌的明天！
最后我希望大家不要做一个无所事事的懒汉，而要做个勤劳朴实的人，让生活日新月异，让我们的未来充满自信与美满，具有一种金石可镂、不屈不挠和持之以恒的精神，让学习中充满成功的喜悦。 莫泊桑说：“人生活在希望之中，一个希望破灭了或实现了，就会有新的希望产生。”新学期就是新的希望，新的征程，新的收获。让我们重新站在新起点，展显出新面貌，一起憧憬更美好的明天，来吧，让我们再一次踏上征途！
篇二：教你作文得满分,六级突破630
考六级的同学注意了，新东方老师真出汗，教你作文得满分，六级突破630
n 1.审题
n 2.构思
n 段首句；举例。
n 3.动笔
n 4.检查
n 1.三段论；
n 2.文章开头尽量避免错误；
n 3.写好第二段基本层次结构；
n 4.多运用关联词语；
n 5.不能说空话，要举例子。
n 例文评分。
n 1.六级作文不要乱喊口号
n We must be honest and faithful to our classmates, party, country and the whole world .
n 2.文章内容要展开，注意举例子和分析原因。
n （1）举例子
n （2）分析原因
n （3）万不得已凑字数
n 1.The methodology suggested may not guarantee the ultimate success, but the eventual pay-off could be worth the effort.
n 2. Achieving even partial success will benefit mankind and contribute to creating a better world.
n 1.大量看范文。
n 2.关注段首句的写法和举例子的写法。
n 3.适当的练习。
n 1.大量看范文。
n 2.关注段首句的写法和举例子的写法。
n 3.适当的练习。
n 1.开头直接切入正题。
n 2.议论文第二段的主题句要写好。
n 3.第二段要分层次展开。
n 4.用名言、举例、解释等手段充实第二段内容。
n 5.结尾要干脆有力。
n 第一段：起始段。
n 第二段：展开段。
n 第三段：结论段。
n 第一段：引出现象或引出话题。
n 引出现象——阐述题；
n 引出话题——观点对立题。
n 现象 phenomenon；
n 话题 issue。
n 模版句1：
n People in growing numbers have become increasingly aware of the seriousness of the phenomenon.
n 模版句2：
n There is a growing concern over the seriousness of the phenomenon.
n 举例(03.12)：the waste on campus
n There is a growing concern over the seriousness of the waste on campus.
n People in growing numbers have become increasingly aware of the seriousness of the waste on campus
n 模版句：
n Whether something should or should not be done is a much debated problem in that it affects many people (in their everyday life).
n 举例(2000.6)：
n Whether the test of speaking English should or should not be taken is a much debated problem in that it affects many university students.
n 举例(97.6)：
n Whether job-hopping should or should not be done is a much debated problem in that it affects many people.
n 正方观点：
n Some people argue that
n 反方观点：
n Others, on the contrary, claim that
n 正方观点（97.6）：
n Some people argue that doing one job does good to one’s career development.
n 反方观点：
Others, on the contrary, claim that job-hopping helps one acquire wide scope of knowledge and accumulate more work experience.
n 我的观点：
n Careful consideration leads me to believe that
n I tend to think that…
n It seems to me that…
n I am of the opinion that…
n I would take view that…
n 第二段主题句：
n The explanation for this phenomenon may include several factors and I will express only a few of the most important ones.
n The reason why I cannot accept the job offered may include several factors and I will express only a few of the most important ones.
n 三个层次：
n first of all;
n in addition;
n furthermore.
n first and foremost,
n besides,
n last but not least
n In the first place
n In the second place
n In the third place
n 个人层面
n 1.个人的兴趣爱好
n Doing something is of great interest, for it adds color to the dull routine of everyday life.
n （02.6）A great many university students are fond of surfing online.
n Surfing online is of great interest, for it adds color to the dull routine of everyday life.
n As a result, a great many university students indulge themselves in the internet.
n 2.丰富/提高生活质量
n Something helps to improve the quality of people’s lives.
n 例：The use of private cars helps to improve the quality of people’s lives.
n 3.运动健身
n Regular exercises benefit both the body and mind.
n 4.社会责任感
n Doing something will develop one’s strong sense of duty.
n 5.参加活动，培养团队合作精神
n Participating in activities can develop a sense of team spirit and cooperation.
n 6.人际关系
篇三：教你作文得满分,六级突破630
? 1.审题
? 2.构思
? 段首句；举例。
? 3.动笔
? 4.检查
? 1.三段论；
? 2.文章开头尽量避免错误；
? 3.写好第二段基本层次结构；
? 4.多运用关联词语；
? 5.不能说空话，要举例子。
? 例文评分。
? 1.
? We must be honest and faithful to our classmates, party, country and the whole world . ?
? （1）举例子
? （2）分析原因
? （3）万不得已凑字数
? 1.The methodology suggested may not guarantee the ultimate success, but the eventual
pay-off could be worth the effort.
? 2. Achieving even partial success will benefit mankind and contribute to creating a better
world.
? 1.大量看范文。
? 2.关注段首句的写法和举例子的写法。
? 3.适当的练习。
? 1.大量看范文。
? 2.关注段首句的写法和举例子的写法。
? 3.适当的练习。
? 1.开头直接切入正题。
? 2.议论文第二段的主题句要写好。
? 3.第二段要分层次展开。
? 4.用名言、举例、解释等手段充实第二段内容。
? 5.结尾要干脆有力。
? 第一段：起始段。
? 第二段：展开段。
? 第三段：结论段。
? 第一段：引出现象或引出话题。
? 引出现象——阐述题；
? 引出话题——观点对立题。
? 现象 phenomenon；
? 话题 issue。
? 模版句1：
?
? 模版句2：
? There is a growing concern over the seriousness of the phenomenon.
? 举例(03.12)： the waste on campus
? There is a growing concern over the seriousness of the waste on campus.
? People in growing numbers have become increasingly aware of the seriousness of the
waste on campus
? 模版句：
? affects many people (in their everyday life).
? 举例(2000.6)：
? Whether the test of speaking English should or should not be taken is a much debated
? 举例(97.6)：
? Whether job-hopping should or should not be done is a much debated problem in that it
affects many people.
? 正方观点：
? Some people argue that
? 反方观点：
? Others, on the contrary, claim that
? 正方观点（97.6）：
? Some people argue that doing one job does good to one’s career development.
? 反方观点：
Others, on the contrary, claim that job-hopping helps one acquire wide scope of knowledge and accumulate more work experience.
? 我的观点：
?
? I tend to think that…
? It seems to me that…
? I am of the opinion that…
? I would take view that…
? 第二段主题句：
? The explanation for this phenomenon
? express only a few of the most important ones.
? 三个层次：
? first of all;
? in addition;
? furthermore.
? first and foremost,
? besides,
? last but not least
? In the first place
? In the second place
? In the third place
? 个人层面
? 1.个人的兴趣爱好
? Doing something is of great interest, for it adds color to the dull routine of everyday life. ? （02.6）A great many university students are fond of surfing online. ? Surfing online is of great interest, for it adds color to the dull routine of everyday life. ? As a result, a great many university students indulge themselves in the internet. ? 2.丰富/提高生活质量
? helps to improve the quality of people’s lives. ? 例：helps to improve the quality of people’s lives. ? 3.运动健身
? ? 4.社会责任感
? . ? 5.参加活动，培养团队合作精神
? ? 6.人际关系
? ? 例：
? 7.个人能力和职业发展
?
? 例：will develop one’s capability and helps one to start a new career. ? career.
? 例：will develop one’s capability and helps one to start a new career. ? career.
? 社会层面
? 1.促进经济发展
? strength. 。
? 例：strength.
? 2.自然和社会资源
? It will lead to great extravagance of natural resources and social resources. ? 例：Clear cutting will lead to great extravagance of natural resources. ? 3.科技发展
? ? 例：extends the scope of human thinking。
? 4、交通
? Too many cars running on the streets lead to air pollution and noise pollution. ? 5.教育
? 好处之一：Get oneself acquainted with the latest development in science and
technology.
? 好处之二：Broaden one’s scope of knowledge.
? 6.旅游
?
? 7.综合状况
? The progress of our society is based on harmony.
基本思路：
主题句+解释+举例（进一步拓展延伸）
? Topic:
? Some people suggest that the government should invest a small amount of money, others
think the museum is a financial burden? What do you think of it? ? 主题句：
? 一个东西给我们带来的好处，对我们产生的影响，或人们普遍的对这一事物的看法。 ? 主题句举例：
? 博物馆可以记录国家的历史
? 1. Museums play an essential role in recording a country’s history. ? history.
? 对主题句解释：
? 博物馆有很多代表一个国家过去的艺术品。 ? 2. Museums usually have great collections of artistic objects which are the symbols of a
country’s glorious past.
? which are the symbols of a country’s glorious past.
? 举例：
? 故宫博物馆里有很多文物。
? 3. For example, the Forbidden City Museum has a collection of antiques.
? ? 进一步拓展：Museum对人们的影响 ? 影响之一：通过参观博物馆，人们可以学到关于历史和文化的东西。 ? 4. By visiting museums, we can learn a lot about our history and culture. ?
? must be in want of a wife. ? It is universally acknowledged that… ? It is well accepted that… ? It is widely believed that ? It is generally maintained that… ? 继续引申：
? 有很多好处，例如可以完善人格. ? 5. A clear understanding of our history and culture does good to the development of
well-rounded character.
? of well-rounded character.
? 2006.12 首次英语新6级作文题——The Importance of Reading Classics（ 阅读经典
的重要性）
? 提纲：1.阅读经典对人的成长至关重要； ? 2.人们越来越少地阅读经典，原因是…… ? 3.作为大学生，你应该怎么做。 ? 主题句：
? 1. There are a lot of reasons for it. ? 理由之一：学生缺乏兴趣·内容过时 ? 2. In the first place, many college students take no interest in reading classics, for they
find classics outdated.
? 理由一的延伸：
? 3. In other words, classics do not meet with their requirement of reading.
? 理由二：学生太忙，没时间阅读经典著作 ? 4. In the second place, nowadays ,many university students are occupied from morning
till night.
? 5. As a result, it is quite difficult for them to squeeze some time to read classics. ? 理由二的延伸：
? 6. Since many students dedicate themselves to studying the course work, they pay no
attention to reading classics. ? 理由三：经典著作比较深奥，让人疲惫厌倦
篇四：考六级的同学注意了,新东方老师真出汗,教你作文得满分,六级突破630
考六级的同学注意了，新东方老师真出汗，教你作文得满分，六级突破630
1.审题
2.构思
3.动笔
4.检查
1.三段论；
2.文章开头尽量避免错误；
3.写好第二段基本层次结构；
4.多运用关联词语；
5.不能说空话，要举例子。
例文评分。
1.六级作文不要乱喊口号
We must be honest and faithful to our classmates, party, country and the whole world .
2.文章内容要展开，注意举例子和分析原因。
（1）举例子
（2）分析原因
（3）万不得已凑字数
1.The methodology suggested may not guarantee the ultimate success, but the eventual pay-off could be worth the effort.
2. Achieving even partial success will benefit mankind and contribute to creating a better world.
1.大量看范文。
2.关注段首句的写法和举例子的写法。
3.适当的练习。
1.大量看范文。
2.关注段首句的写法和举例子的写法。
3.适当的练习。
1.开头直接切入正题。
2.议论文第二段的主题句要写好。
3.第二段要分层次展开。
4.用名言、举例、解释等手段充实第二段内容。
5.结尾要干脆有力。
第一段：起始段。
第二段：展开段。
第三段：结论段。
第一段：引出现象或引出话题。
引出现象——阐述题；
引出话题——观点对立题。
现象 phenomenon；
话题 issue。
模版句1：
People in growing numbers have become increasingly aware of the seriousness of the phenomenon.
模版句2：
There is a growing concern over the seriousness of the phenomenon.
举例(03.12)： the waste on campus
There is a growing concern over the seriousness of the waste on campus.
People in growing numbers have become increasingly aware of the seriousness of the waste on campus
模版句：
Whether something should or should not be done is a much debated problem in that it affects many people (in their everyday life).
举例(2000.6)：
Whether the test of speaking English should or should not be taken is a much debated problem in that it affects many university students.
举例(97.6)：
Whether job-hopping should or should not be done is a much debated problem in that it affects many people.
正方观点：
Som(来自:WWw.SmhaiDa.com 海达范文网:我怕打针630字作文)e people argue that
反方观点：
Others, on the contrary, claim that
正方观点（97.6）：
Some people argue that doing one job does good to one’s career development.
反方观点：
Others, on the contrary, claim that job-hopping helps one acquire wide scope of knowledge and accumulate more work experience.
我的观点：
Careful consideration leads me to believe that
I tend to think that…
It seems to me that…
I am of the opinion that…
I would take view that…
第二段主题句：
The explanation for this phenomenon may include several factors and I will express only a few of the most important ones.
The reason why I cannot accept the job offered may include several factors and I will express only a few of the most important ones.
三个层次：
first of all;
in addition;
furthermore.
first and foremost,
besides,
last but not least
In the first place
In the second place
In the third place
个人层面
1.个人的兴趣爱好
Doing something is of great interest, for it adds color to the dull routine of everyday life. （02.6）A great many university students are fond of surfing online.
Surfing online is of great interest, for it adds color to the dull routine of everyday life. As a result, a great many university students indulge themselves in the internet.
2.丰富/提高生活质量
Something helps to improve the quality of people’s lives.
例：The use of private cars helps to improve the quality of people’s lives.
3.运动健身
Regular exercises benefit both the body and mind.
4.社会责任感
Doing something will develop one’s strong sense of duty.
5.参加活动，培养团队合作精神
Participating in activities can develop a sense of team spirit and cooperation.
6.人际关系
Doing something will enhance mutual understanding.
例：Talking with my roommates will enhance mutual understanding.
7.个人能力和职业发展
Doing something will develop one’s capability and helps one to start a new career.
例：Working hard will develop one’s capability and helps one to start a new career.
Getting proper training will develop one’s capability and helps one to start a new career.
例：Working hard will develop one’s capability and helps one to start a new career.
Getting proper training will develop one’s capability and helps one to start a new career.
社会层面
1.促进经济发展
It helps to improve the economic strength. 。
例：The recent policy helps to improve the economic strength.
2.自然和社会资源
It will lead to great extravagance of natural resources and social resources.
例：Clear cutting will lead to great extravagance of natural resources.
3.科技发展
It is a symbol of human progress and it extends the scope of human thinking.
例：The development of science and technology is a symbol of human progress and it extends the scope of human thinking。
4、交通
Too many cars running on the streets lead to air pollution and noise pollution.
5.教育
好处之一：Get oneself acquainted with the latest development in science and technology. 好处之二：Broaden one’s scope of knowledge.
6.旅游
The tourist industry has played an important role in meeting the cultural needs of the public and carrying forward national culture.
7.综合状况
The progress of our society is based on harmony.
基本思路：
主题句+解释+举例（进一步拓展延伸）
Topic:
Some people suggest that the government should invest a small amount of money, others think the museum is a financial burden? What do you think of it?
主题句：
一个东西给我们带来的好处，对我们产生的影响，或人们普遍的对这一事物的看法。 主题句举例：
博物馆可以记录国家的历史
1. Museums play an essential role in recording a country’s history.
1. Admittedly, museums, of course, play an essential role in recording a country’s history.
对主题句解释：
博物馆有很多代表一个国家过去的艺术品。
2. Museums usually have great collections of artistic objects which are the symbols of a country’s glorious past.
2.As is known to the world, museums usually have great collections of artistic objects which are the symbols of a country’s glorious past.
举例：
故宫博物馆里有很多文物。
3. For example, the Forbidden City Museum has a collection of antiques.
3. For example, the Forbidden City Museum has a huge collection of delicate antiques of artistic and historical value.
进一步拓展：Museum对人们的影响
影响之一：通过参观博物馆，人们可以学到关于历史和文化的东西。
4. By visiting museums, we can learn a lot about our history and culture.
4. It is widely acknowledged that we can learn a lot about our history and culture by visiting museums in our leisure time.
It is a truth universally acknowledged that a single man in possession of a good fortune must be in want of a wife.
It is universally acknowledged that…
It is well accepted that…
It is widely believed that
It is generally maintained that…
继续引申：
有很多好处，例如可以完善人格.
5. A clear understanding of our history and culture does good to the development of well-rounded character.
5.It is a clear understanding of our history and culture that does good to the development of well-rounded character.
2006.12 首次英语新6级作文题——The Importance of Reading Classics（ 阅读经典的重要性）
提纲：1.阅读经典对人的成长至关重要；
2.人们越来越少地阅读经典，原因是……
3.作为大学生，你应该怎么做。
主题句：
1. There are a lot of reasons for it.
理由之一：学生缺乏兴趣?内容过时
2. In the first place, many college students take no interest in reading classics, for they find classics outdated.
理由一的延伸：
3. In other words, classics do not meet with their requirement of reading.
理由二：学生太忙，没时间阅读经典著作
4. In the second place, nowadays ,many university students are occupied from morning till night.
5. As a result, it is quite difficult for them to squeeze some time to read classics.
理由二的延伸：
6. Since many students dedicate themselves to studying the course work, they pay no attention to reading classics.
理由三：经典著作比较深奥，让人疲惫厌倦
7. In the third place, the contents of classics are usually filled with abstruse concepts and ideas.
理由三的延伸：
8. Therefore, college students invariably feel tired and bored in the process of reading. 总结段落结构：8句话构成整个第二段
篇五：2013年江苏南通中考作文题解与佳作示例字数
2013年江苏南通中考作文题解与佳作示例字数：3172来源：作文与考试·初中版 2013年25期 字体：大 中 小 打印当页正文 【中考真题】
阅读下面的文字，根据要求作文。
声音，也许来自天籁：风声、雨声、鸟啼声??声声入耳；声音，也许来自生活：掌声、笑声、叮咛声??声声温馨；声音，也许来自情境：书声、歌声、抚琴声??声声醉人。 在我们记忆深处，很多生活影像也许已经泛黄、模糊，然而，那些曾经叩击我们心灵的声音，会时常穿越时空，在我们耳畔深情地响起，潮湿我们的眼眸，温暖我们的人生。 请根据自己的生活经历和切身体验，以“有一种声音，在记忆深处”为题，写一篇文章。 要求：
①除诗歌外，文体不限；
②不少于600字；
③文中不得出现真实的地名、校名和人名；
④书写要正确、规范、美观。
【文题解读】
2013年南通市中考作文《有一种声音，在记忆深处》依然延续了2011年的《那一刻，我的世界春暖花开》，2012年的《就这样慢慢长大》的命题思路与风格，作文的题目不仅极富诗意，而且凸显阳光。我们该如何去解读呢？可以从以下几个方面去考虑。
1.准确审清题意。我们在审读《有一种声音，在记忆深处》这个文题时，必须把握住两个关键词：一是“一种声音”，二是“记忆深处”。与此同时，还得搞清楚这两个词语之间的内在联系，也就是说，这种声音，为什么会留在我的记忆深处？而最为重要的是，这样一种声音，对“我”的成长产生过什么样的影响，这应该是审题的关键。而且考生需注意的是，这种声音，不是自己发出的，而是外界及别人发出的。一种声音可以指一句话，也可以是几句话，不过这几句话要有一个共同的主题。
2.明确选材范围。作文的提示语给出了选材的依据，也就是说我们该选择哪些声音，不过值得提醒的是，这种声音不止是文章的一条线索，它更应该是文章情感的载体。这种声音可以是自然界的风声、雨声、鸟鸣声，可以是校园里的书声、歌声、呐喊声，也可以生活中的掌声、笑声、叮咛声等有形的声音。当然也可以写一些无形的声音，比如像从心底发出的“我一定能行”等声音。需引起广大考生注意的是，这种声音，可以是中听的，也可以是不中听的，可以是曾经有的，也可以是现在有的，可以是悠扬的，也可以是沉郁的??都属于是选材的范围。
3.突出情感体验。这种声音之所以能够留在记忆深处，关键的一点就是能够引起我们的情感共鸣，所以把握情感是文章必不可少的，声音只是表达情感的载体。
【满分佳作】
有一种声音，在记忆深处
◎南通市一考生
微风拂过床前，轻柔地去了，只留下窗外的纸风铃，悠悠地回响，如外婆绵长的细语，虽不悦耳，但也语重心长。
灶前的炉火，升腾起氤氲的热气，暮霭一样散开。火光映射在我的手臂上，像溅开的麦芒。炉内的水汽顶起炉盖，发出“扑扑”的声响。我闭上双眼，细细地谛听，那是外婆的帆布鞋摩挲地面时柔柔的足音。
外婆，我已忆不起我“咿呀”学语时您教我的歌谣，也无法遥想我酣然入梦时您喃喃的细语。我只能听到有一种声音——您编织的纸风铃摇摆时的回响，您烧水的锅炉中水汽的余音，始终留在我记忆的深处。
拨弄纸风铃，抚平每一处褶皱，仿佛触摸您多茧的双手。每一只铃身都留下您指间的纹
路，每一次翻折都留下您掌心的裂痕。我仿佛看到，您安详地坐在床头，双手折叠着纸风铃，老花镜的后面，是慈爱的目光。我仿佛听到，一根针正缓缓穿过铃身，摩擦出吱呀的声响，又串起一只只风铃，在微风中摇摆、歌唱。
朦胧的晨曦中，我耳旁似在萦绕，灶前锅碗盆勺所演奏出的奇异的交响。睁开迷蒙的睡眼，侧耳倾听，那是您早起后，为我做饭的声音。我于是披衣起床，只看到炉火前的您，正向灶里添柴，身前的炉子里，蒸腾出扑扑的水汽。您的帆布鞋伴随着身体，微微颤动，单薄的身影下，又传来鞋底细切的声响。火光中，我的泪与灶中的柴，一起消融。
如今，您已离我而去，但每当我闭眼静听时，总觉得那窗外的纸风铃和炉内的水汽所发出的声音时时刻刻在告诉我，您对我的关心，您对我的期望，也会同这声音一样留在我的记忆深处??
【评点】
一、构思巧妙，蕴含真情。这篇文章最大的亮点，就是考生巧妙地运用了“有一种声音”中的“一种”。事实上，考生写的是一类，其中包括炉子发出的“扑扑”声，帆布鞋摩挲地面时发出的足音，以及奶奶编织的纸风铃的摇摆声。而这一切声音的主人公都是奶奶，对这些声音的怀念正是小作者对奶奶的怀念，真情实感。
二、内容集中，主题深刻。尽管考生写到了不少声音，但是我们发现这样的构思并不跑题，因为这些声音都是一样的声音，都饱含了奶奶对“我”无微不至的关心和厚爱。文章结尾的议论兼抒情既揭示了主题，又突出了中心。
【满分佳作】
有一种声音，在记忆深处
◎南通市一考生
有一种声音，悄悄地盘旋在耳边，凝结在空气的浮动中，轻盈地飘向那个叫作从前的地方。
“哒哒哒哒??哒哒哒哒??”
旧式缝纫机的声音从这栋简陋的灰色小平房里传出，我趴在桌子上，撑着胖胖鼓鼓的脸颊，眼皮就像外婆的动作，伴着节奏分明的缝纫机声，一下一下，一踏一踏。这样的声音，模糊了岁月，清晰了惦念。
外婆身材瘦小，在笨重的缝纫机前显得更微不足道。但外婆并非看起来的那么柔弱，灵活的操作让缝纫机看起来更像一只被驯服的老虎。在我看来，她们更像一对朋友。
每当午后，哒哒的缝纫机声总会萦绕在每一个角落。简约的音符就像跳华尔兹的恋人，让空气的流动都慢了下来，感觉像是呼吸着甜蜜与幸福。外婆粗糙且瘦小的手指绕过洁白的棉线，脚板像跷跷板一样上下踏动。外婆微笑着，偶尔抬头望望昏昏欲睡的我。小时候我只感觉到眼前像音符在跳动，现在想想，又是一番陶醉。
在搬新房子的时候，妈妈和舅舅也问过外婆是否要保留这尘封的缝纫机。外婆笑了笑，指尖滑过盖住缝纫机的黑布，淡淡地说了句：“不必了，不要让这破玩意儿打破了你们所说的新时尚。它老了，我也老了。”
午后的阳光，透过窗隙轻柔地照射在指缝间，像是温柔的轻抚，让人想起从前的温暖。耳边突然响起“哒哒哒哒??哒哒哒哒??”的声音。不知是这串阳光勾起了亘长的回忆，还是回忆让这丝阳光如昨日般柔情温暖。只是顷刻间，像是呼吸着从前甜蜜且幸福的空气，眼皮失重而闭合了双眼，我又如儿时安稳地沉睡了。梦里又是那个瘦小的老人，我的眼角不觉留下泪痕。
的确，有这样一种声音催促着我成长，更有这样一种声音见证了时光。缝纫机老了，外婆老了。失去光彩的岁月让人怅惘，让人心酸。我不敢去估算外婆还能陪伴我的时间，只知道她头上的白发再也不可数尽。“哒哒哒哒??”的缝纫机声仍像催眠曲般回环荡漾，但梦
中的这个模样已有多久没有探望。
爱，不是华丽的文字可以肆意编织一番。爱，要像安稳和谐的缝纫机声一样，永远留在心上。
有一种声音，在我们的记忆深处；有一种回忆，让我们领略到爱在手心里。
【评点】
一、构思巧妙，立意深刻。文章虽然写的是一台缝纫机发出的声音，但是考生用“爱，不是华丽的文字可以肆意编织一番。爱，要像安稳和谐的缝纫机声一样，永远留在心上”这样的议论抒情句，巧妙地揭示了文章的中心和深刻的主题。
二、语言优美，耐人品味。这篇考场佳作的语言优美，很值得玩味，尤其是像“简约的音符就像跳华尔兹的恋人，让空气的流动都慢了下来，感觉像是呼吸着甜蜜与幸福”、“模糊了岁月，清晰了惦念”这样优美的语言，更让我们感到这篇文章的过人之处。
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