六级作文,Nowadays,there are a large number of people like to celebrate Westem Festivals such as Christmas Day,Thanksgiving Day and so on.During these festivals,people have activities the same to Western countries.They go shopping,prepare present

六级作文,Nowadays,there are a large number of people like to celebrate Westem Festivals such as Christmas Day,Thanksgiving Day and so on.During these festivals,people have activities the same to Western countries.They go shopping,prepare present
六级作文,
Nowadays,there are a large number of people like to celebrate Westem Festivals such as Christmas Day,Thanksgiving Day and so on.During these festivals,people have activities the same to Western countries.They go shopping,prepare present for friends and have a dinner with relatives.
The reasons why western festivals are so popular in China are as follows.On the one hand ,the contents of western festivals are very colourful,so they can make people feel happiness.With the stress of living becomes bigger then big,people are willing to celebrate Western Festivals.On the other hand,as the pace of globalization has been accelerated,the culture differences between each country decreased.So people in our country can accept western festivals and become enjoy them.
Every coin has two sides.This phenomeno makes culture colourful while it also decreases our intention of protect troditional festivals.

六级作文,Nowadays,there are a large number of people like to celebrate Westem Festivals such as Christmas Day,Thanksgiving Day and so on.During these festivals,people have activities the same to Western countries.They go shopping,prepare present
第5行的on the one hand 去掉the,不需要定冠词
第6行的colourful,您指的是多彩吧?可以把句子改成：On one hand,western festivals have very rich/varied contents,so they can make people feel happy.
这里的happiness是名词,应当为feel+形容词（happy）
第7行becomes改为becoming,poeple后面的部分也改为 are more willing to .以配合上文的递进关系
第9行的decreased改为has decreased.become去掉
最后一句重新整理为：
This phenomeno makes culture colourful while decreasing our intention of protecting troditianal (Chinese) festivals.

Nowadays, there are a large number of people like to celebrate Westem Festivals such as Christmas Day, Thanksgiving Day and so on. During these festivals, people have activities the same as Western co...

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Nowadays, there are a large number of people like to celebrate Westem Festivals such as Christmas Day, Thanksgiving Day and so on. During these festivals, people have activities the same as Western countries. They go shopping, prepare present for friends and have a dinner with relatives.
The reasons why western festivals are so popular in China are as follows. On the one hand ,the contents of western festivals are very colourful, so they can make people feel happy. With the heavy living pressure ,people are willing to celebrate Western Festivals. On the other hand, as the pace of globalization has been accelerated, the culture differences between each country decreased. So people in our country can accept western festivals and become enjoy them.
Every coin has two sides. This phenomeno makes culture colourful while it also decreases our intention of protect troditional festivals.

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bigger than big应该是bigger than bigger还有就是最后一段traditional评错了

Westem 改为Westen , the same as. 还不错