英语日记修改22:13 2008-3-7Friday March 7 2008 warmthe weather has already became warm,and the horrible and cold winter has been far away from us,it is the coldest winter i have ever come across,i really do hope it will forever disappear ,never

英语日记修改22:13 2008-3-7Friday March 7 2008 warmthe weather has already became warm,and the horrible and cold winter has been far away from us,it is the coldest winter i have ever come across,i really do hope it will forever disappear ,never
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22:13 2008-3-7
Friday March 7 2008 warm
the weather has already became warm,and the horrible and cold winter has been far away from us,it is the coldest winter i have ever come across,i really do hope it will forever disappear ,never come back.
although the cold weather has been left,but my studing go on none the less.
today,maybe it is a bad day for somebody,as it is the day that our achievement of the simulant examination had been came out,however,for me,today it was a indeed changeling,for one thing,i was rather fear about the achievement,for another thing,i still want to know my achievement hopefully.
Finally,i know all of my achievement,which will be a sad memory spring into my mind,i was indeed down,not only the achievement upset me a lot,but also it indeed disappoint my techers a lot ,who show a great support on me,however,what i want to say isn's sorry,it is just trust me again,i must do well in it next time,just believe me ,as this mouth i waste many time to play games and do other things that have nothing with studing,now,i have made much of my habit of wasting time,what's more,i will warm myself more often than not,i must cultivate myself in the nature of industry,it will help a lot,i have took note of it,i hope everyone just believe me again.
now,i am burning ,i consider i can take it ,yes,i can,and i do.

英语日记修改22:13 2008-3-7Friday March 7 2008 warmthe weather has already became warm,and the horrible and cold winter has been far away from us,it is the coldest winter i have ever come across,i really do hope it will forever disappear ,never
22:13 2008-3-7
Friday March 7th.2008 warm
The weather has became warm,and the horrible and cold winter has been far away from us.It must be the coldest winter I have ever come across,I really do hope it would never come back .
Although the cold weather has been left,but my studing go on none the less.
Today maybe a bad day for somebody,as it is the day that our achievement of the simulant examination is coming out,however,for me,today,it was an indeed changeling,on the one hand,I was rather fear about the achievement,on the another hand,I still want to know my achievement hopefully.
Finally,I know all of my achievement,which would be a sad memory spring into my mind,I was indeed down,not only the achievement,but also it would indeed disappoint my techers severely ,who support me greatly.However,what I want to say isn's sorry,I assure that I must do well in next time,please believe me again,in this month I waste too much time playing games and doing other things .Now,i have given up these my bad habits ,what's more,i have made myself schedule,i must cultivate myself in the nature of industry,it will give me a lot help,i have took note earnestly,i expect everyone just believe me again.
now,i am burning ,i believe i can understand it ,yes,i can do it.
真的不得不说看你日记好累哦,又不是写中文,你一个意思用不同的词汇来表示,说明你有文采,英语一直一个意思（相信我,给我个机会）,就有一直繁琐,好啰嗦的感觉,一个意思最好还是用不同的词,简单明了表示就好了.

用is becoming warm 比较好
disappear forever. 这段断下句比较好。
although 后不加but.后面句话也不通。although the cold weather has been left,my study will go on with no less.
maybe today is...
哦。我。。。就看到着吧。。。 = = ...

22:13 2008-3-7
3月7日2008日温暖
天气有的星期五已经变得温暖，并且可怕和冷的冬天是很远从我们，它是我遇到了的最冷的冬天，我真正地希望它永远消失，不会回来。
虽然冷气候被留下，但是我studing无论如何去在。
今天，可能它是一坏天为某人，因为它是天我们的假装考试的成就是出来了，然而，为我，今天它的确是低能儿，首先，我宁可是对成就的恐惧，为...

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22:13 2008-3-7
3月7日2008日温暖
天气有的星期五已经变得温暖，并且可怕和冷的冬天是很远从我们，它是我遇到了的最冷的冬天，我真正地希望它永远消失，不会回来。
虽然冷气候被留下，但是我studing无论如何去在。
今天，可能它是一坏天为某人，因为它是天我们的假装考试的成就是出来了，然而，为我，今天它的确是低能儿，首先，我宁可是对成就的恐惧，为另一件事，我仍然想要知道我的成就有希望地…

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