这封信有什么语法错误或者用词和格式上的错误吗Dear XXX,I hope everything goes well as you receive the letter.It's my first time writting letter in English.What's more,I don't know as a fan what I should say to my favorite singer.B

这封信有什么语法错误或者用词和格式上的错误吗Dear XXX,I hope everything goes well as you receive the letter.It's my first time writting letter in English.What's more,I don't know as a fan what I should say to my favorite singer.B
这封信有什么语法错误或者用词和格式上的错误吗
Dear XXX,
I hope everything goes well as you receive the letter.
It's my first time writting letter in English.What's more,I don't know as a fan what I should say to my favorite singer.Before writting this letter to you,I heared a song named ,so Igot up my courage because I want to introduce it to you.It's pop music in my country.I like it so much that I hope you could like it,too...Though I don't tjink I can perform it perfectly,I'll try my best.
By the way,in fact,I prefer your current voice,we're all proud of you.Just go!Go!Go!However,even though like this,when I hear a song you sang before,Ialso feel so regrettableevery time.Even I can't understand myself...
That's all right,we'll be favour of you all the time.
With love,
Yours XXX
有没有什么地方词不达意或者不恰当的
这个歌手以前一直是童星一枚，非常红的，前两年刚刚度过了变声期，我更喜欢他变声以后的声音，可是反响却没有以前好。所以现在在外面听到的他的歌大多还是他小时候唱的，所以觉得好遗憾啊，而且以前的声音也非常美好，一想到它已经是过去式了，就觉得很惆怅。大概是这样的。没办法，水平不行，您能帮个忙么。还有那啥hope和wish除了可能性大小的区别外还有什么差吗？

这封信有什么语法错误或者用词和格式上的错误吗Dear XXX,I hope everything goes well as you receive the letter.It's my first time writting letter in English.What's more,I don't know as a fan what I should say to my favorite singer.B
帮你修改了格式,部分不地道的句子,我在澳洲呆过几年,希望能帮你.
Dear XXX,
It is very lovely thing that I am writing to you.
It's my first time writing letter in English.Meanwhile,I don't know as a fan what I should say to my favorite singer.Before writing to you,I heard a song named ,which encouraged me E-mail to you,I want to introduce this song to you.It's a pop one in my country.I like it so much that I wish you could like it,too...Though I don't think I can sing it well,I am doing my best.
I prefer your beautiful sound.We are all proud of you.Just go!Go!Go!However,I am afraid I need to let you know,I do not understand your every single song well because my language barrier.I just can catch those feelings.I like the songs you sing very much.I really appreciate that very much.
Best withes!
Yours Faithfully,（用于陌生人）
XXX

语法没有什么问题，但是很多地方表达不到位，用词有点小问题
修正如下
Dear XXX,
I hope everything goes well as you receive this letter.
It's my first time writting letter in English.Meanwhile,I don't know as a ...

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语法没有什么问题，但是很多地方表达不到位，用词有点小问题
修正如下
Dear XXX,
I hope everything goes well as you receive this letter.
It's my first time writting letter in English.Meanwhile,I don't know as a fan what I should say to my favorite singer.Before writting to you,I heared a song named ,which helped me to get up my courage, because I want to introduce it to you.It's a pop one in my country.I like it so much that I wish you could like it,too...Though I don't think I can perform it perfectly,I'll try my best.
By the way,in fact,I prefer your current voice.We're all proud of you.Just go!Go!Go! However,even though liking this,when I hear a song you sang before,I also feel so regrettable every time.Even I can't understand myself...
说实话，这一段我没看懂你想说什么
That's all right,we'll be favour of you all the time.Best withes！
Lovingly yours,
XXX

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