麻烦帮我看看这篇 雅思作文 .顺便我改改,打个分.本人今年4月12号就要烤鸭了,第二次烤鸭,要求6分以上,这是我练的一篇雅思作文.希望各位大大牛牛们帮我看看,指出不足之处,顺便给个分数.Som

麻烦帮我看看这篇 雅思作文 .顺便我改改,打个分.本人今年4月12号就要烤鸭了,第二次烤鸭,要求6分以上,这是我练的一篇雅思作文.希望各位大大牛牛们帮我看看,指出不足之处,顺便给个分数.Som
麻烦帮我看看这篇 雅思作文 .顺便我改改,打个分.
本人今年4月12号就要烤鸭了,第二次烤鸭,要求6分以上,这是我练的一篇雅思作文.希望各位大大牛牛们帮我看看,指出不足之处,顺便给个分数.
Some people think the government should spend more money on public services other than waste money on arts (music or painting).To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays,many people argue against the government allocating money to public services outweigh investing in arts.Actually,public services and arts have improved the quality of our lives and play an important in our daily life.However,it also creates some problems as well.
On the one hand,there are two advantages of public services such as schools and hospitals.First of all,school is one of the most important public services and it can solve the problems of education.Therefore,it can promote population quality.This point can be confirmed by the example of the number of schools in some developed countries.Secondly,while some people get sick.Only hospital can cure them.Thus,hospitals are necessary for the citizens.From what has been discussed above,it seems we may draw the conclusion that the government should allocate more money to public services other than invest in arts.
But on the other hand,arts have its advantages,too.For one thing,the arts sometimes are the same important as public services,and because of this,after a whole week’s hardworking,people can enjoy a wonderful musical event in the music hall.For another,as some citizens can cultivate their taste in the gallery,the gallery can let them relax themselves.Therefore,there is necessary that more structures of art have been built in terms of modern society.
So as shown above,I agree that we can not live without public services for the conveniences it brings to us.However,I am convinced that arts are necessary and affects it creates on the modern life,and that I do not agree the government should allocated money to public services outweigh invest in arts.

麻烦帮我看看这篇 雅思作文 .顺便我改改,打个分.本人今年4月12号就要烤鸭了,第二次烤鸭,要求6分以上,这是我练的一篇雅思作文.希望各位大大牛牛们帮我看看,指出不足之处,顺便给个分数.Som
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