谁能帮我改作文?Fight against desertification and sandstormsIt is vividly depicted in the picture that a man holding an ax have cut off all of trees,although there are some word “protect enviroment” on his T-shirt..As is symbolically reveal

谁能帮我改作文?Fight against desertification and sandstormsIt is vividly depicted in the picture that a man holding an ax have cut off all of trees,although there are some word “protect enviroment” on his T-shirt..As is symbolically reveal
谁能帮我改作文?
Fight against desertification and sandstorms
It is vividly depicted in the picture that a man holding an ax have cut off all of trees,although there are some word “protect enviroment” on his T-shirt..As is symbolically revealed in the picture,the deforestation and desertification is getting more serious in our country at persent ,and sand storm have attracted many northern cities .We must take the action which fight against desertification and sandstorm right now.
To start with ,the main reason which lead to the desertification is the deforestation fromfactory from factorys and woodmen.Further more,more and more citizen occuped vast forest every year,which also become one of the important reason.Eventually,not only do human beings felled a large of trees,but also there are few people carry on planting new trees every year.
Takeing into account all those factors,we can reasonably conclude that we must do something about it at once.On the one hand,it is time to protect trees from felling.on the other hand,we should put special emphasis on the improvement in our mind.

谁能帮我改作文?Fight against desertification and sandstormsIt is vividly depicted in the picture that a man holding an ax have cut off all of trees,although there are some word “protect enviroment” on his T-shirt..As is symbolically reveal
有些语句啰嗦,如果能改题目,建议你别写,你是几年级的?
enviroment,Further等用词不当
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This spring, 1/8 of China has been covered by sand after a series of sand storms hitting the country. In one of the worst days, about 330,000 tons of sand fell in Beijing. Meanwhile, within a crow-fly distance of just 70 kilometers away from the city, the nearest desert is still advancing on the capital. Some say China is now at war, one that fights against expanding desert and rapid desertification. What has caused the severe sand storm in China this year? Does desertification play an important role? How has China being dealing with the issue? Are the methods effective?