我写了一篇英语作文,可以帮我改改吗?用高中的词,初中的也行.partnerI join a new class this term.The others often new each other because of they were in one class before except me.I only knew one girl's name when I was come.So I

我写了一篇英语作文,可以帮我改改吗?用高中的词,初中的也行.partnerI join a new class this term.The others often new each other because of they were in one class before except me.I only knew one girl's name when I was come.So I
我写了一篇英语作文,可以帮我改改吗?用高中的词,初中的也行.
partner
I join a new class this term.The others often new each other because of they were in one class before except me.I only knew one girl's name when I was come.So I must making friends with each other.But I'm a scilent boy.I only know two boys sat nearing me.
The boy set the nearest me names XXX.He had black short hairwith good-tempered.
And another boy is different.He is warm-hearted,talkative and humor.His name is YYY.He seems good friends with XXX.
All students in this class are hard-working.So I must studing hearder.

我写了一篇英语作文,可以帮我改改吗?用高中的词,初中的也行.partnerI join a new class this term.The others often new each other because of they were in one class before except me.I only knew one girl's name when I was come.So I
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My partner,
I joined in a new class this term.I mostly know anyone in the class..I only knew one girl's name when I came.So I must make friends with others.But I'm a scilent boy.I only know two boys sitting near me.
The boy sitting nearer me is XXX.He had black short hair and good-tempered.
And another boy is different.He is warm-hearted,talkative and humor.His name is YYY.The two boy are good friends.
All students in this class are hard-working.So I must study hard!

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后几段写得较好。前几句有点错。比如‘often new ‘，’was come’
I join a new class this term. The others all know each other because they were in one class last term.I only knew one girl's name when I came. So I'd make ...

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后几段写得较好。前几句有点错。比如‘often new ‘，’was come’
I join a new class this term. The others all know each other because they were in one class last term.I only knew one girl's name when I came. So I'd make friends with others. As I'm a scilent boy,I only know two boys sitting nearby.
The nearest boy names XXX.
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