请提出修改意见,并指出语法错误,改得好的追加50分!Helping Others Helping others,in my opinion,is an old but common subject among us.My parents always told me to help others as much as I can.Since it is so important,what’s the impo

请提出修改意见,并指出语法错误,改得好的追加50分!Helping Others Helping others,in my opinion,is an old but common subject among us.My parents always told me to help others as much as I can.Since it is so important,what’s the impo
请提出修改意见,并指出语法错误,改得好的追加50分!
Helping Others
Helping others,in my opinion,is an old but common subject among us.My parents always told me to help others as much as I can.Since it is so important,what’s the importance of helping?
On one hand,there are a lot of people that need help around us,such as the needy,the lonely,and especially the disabled people.They don’t live as conveniently as us,and even some of them think the life is dark and hopeless.
At that time,some money and food can make them satisfied,and even a warm greeting or an encouraging smile can help them get back their confidence to life.Helping makes our society a harmonious one.
On the other hand,helping others makes ourselves feel happy.Once I saw a woman dropped her purse in the street and I picked it up for her.I thought it was an ordinary thing,but she thanked me sincerely.I feel very happy.
The more we care for others,the more happiness we will get in return.“The rose in her hand,the flavor in mine”,I deeply believe it.
Actions speak louder than words.Let’s try our best to help people around us,and make the world a warmer place!
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请提出修改意见,并指出语法错误,改得好的追加50分!Helping Others Helping others,in my opinion,is an old but common subject among us.My parents always told me to help others as much as I can.Since it is so important,what’s the impo
通读全文,这个作文的题目是"帮助他人".现在就错误列举如下：
一、题目
错误点：我们通常说帮助他人,直接讲“help others”,而不用helping others.
原因：help是一个及物动词,后面可以直接跟宾语.只有不及物动词后面需要跟宾语的时候才加ing.
二、第一段
1、“helping others” .解释同错误一.
2、“My parents always told me to help others as much as I can.”
首先翻译作者这句话的意思：我的父母经常提醒我要尽我所能的帮助他人.
这句话的错误点比较复杂：
① 错误点：always 和 told 这两个用在一起是错误的.
原因：always是“总是,老是,经常”的意思.既然是“老是”叫我尽我所能帮助他人,那么说明目前也是叫我尽我所能帮助他人.所以told的使用就有问题,不能用过去时,而应该用一般现在时.
如果作者的意思是过去经常,那么就不能用always 来表示这个经常的意思,而应该用used to.
② 错误点：tell me to help others as much as I can.
原因：tell这个词的短语是tell sb.sth.而不用tell sb.to do sth.
总结以上2点,这个句子改法有两种,分别为：
My parents always ask me to help others as much as I can.或者
My parents used to ask me to help others as much as I could.
第二段：
1、“there are a lot of people that need help around us”
我们周围有许多人需要帮助.
从整个句子来看,定语从句的使用是非常值得表扬的.
错误点：people that need help around us
原因：定语从句的主语延伸是前面的people,既然是people,那么在从句的
就应该使用who,而不是物的that.that一般是当主语的物的时使用.
改正：
there are a lot of people who need help around us.
暂时分析一、二两段吧.如果有什么不对,希望大家指出,共同学习和进步.