一片英语小短文麻烦检查一下有错吗my sundayIt's sunday today.I got up at 8 o'clock.Then I washed my face and brushed my teeth.I cleaned my room too.I had breakfast at half past five.And then I go for a walk in the park near my home.I di

一片英语小短文麻烦检查一下有错吗my sundayIt's sunday today.I got up at 8 o'clock.Then I washed my face and brushed my teeth.I cleaned my room too.I had breakfast at half past five.And then I go for a walk in the park near my home.I di
一片英语小短文麻烦检查一下有错吗
my sunday
It's sunday today.I got up at 8 o'clock.Then I washed my face and brushed my teeth.I cleaned my room too.I had breakfast at half past five.And then I go for a walk in the park near my home.I did my homework at ten o'clock.I had lunch at 12 o'clock.I went shopping in the afternoon.I also played computer games.In the evening,I watched TV.I go to bed at ten o'clock.

一片英语小短文麻烦检查一下有错吗my sundayIt's sunday today.I got up at 8 o'clock.Then I washed my face and brushed my teeth.I cleaned my room too.I had breakfast at half past five.And then I go for a walk in the park near my home.I di
你8点起床床,5点半吃早饭.语法也有错"It's sunday today"这句错了,应该是"Yesterday is sunday"
Then I washed my face and brushed my teeth andI cleaned my room too.不能直接加too
And then I go for a walk in the park near my home改为And then I went for a walk in the park near my home
I went shopping in the afternoon.加上and I also played computer games不然就别加also

"It's sunday today"这句错了,应该是"Yesterday is sunday"
"And then I go for a walk in the park near my home."改"And then I went for a walk in the park near my home."
"I go to bed at ten o'clock."改"I went to bed at ten o'clock.

日记体的话开头应注意格式，你那样不太标准
左边顶格写日期，月日年，星期，右边顶格写天气
要是不是日记体就不用了
then I go for a walk——then I went for a walk
I go to bed at ten o'clock——I went to bed at ten o'clock
没有别的大的语法错误了，可以多加一些副词、形...

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日记体的话开头应注意格式，你那样不太标准
左边顶格写日期，月日年，星期，右边顶格写天气
要是不是日记体就不用了
then I go for a walk——then I went for a walk
I go to bed at ten o'clock——I went to bed at ten o'clock
没有别的大的语法错误了，可以多加一些副词、形容词、连词等美化一下
还有你8点起床，咋会5：30吃早饭呢

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8点起床 5点半吃早饭 强
it's sunday today为Yesterday is sunday
And then I go for a walk in the park near my home
不是go for是went for
I go to bed at ten o'clock
go to 为went to

你8点起床，咋会5：30吃早饭呢？

It's sunday today.I got up at 8 o'clock.Then I washed my face and brushed my teeth.I cleaned my room too.I had breakfast at half past five.And then I go （went）for a walk in the park near my home.I did...

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It's sunday today.I got up at 8 o'clock.Then I washed my face and brushed my teeth.I cleaned my room too.I had breakfast at half past five.And then I go （went）for a walk in the park near my home.I did my homework at ten o'clock.I had lunch at 12 o'clock.I went shopping in the afternoon.I also played computer games.In the evening,I watched TV. I go(went) to bed at ten(22) o'clock.
真是一篇流水帐

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1.第二行的And前面用的是逗号，这是一个语法，是必需的。
2.第二行的倒数第二个字go应换成went,还有最后一行。
3.总体不错，就是要注意前后时态的一致性。
还有就是ibear1314 说的逻辑问题，应该注意一下。

my sunday
today is sunday .I got up at 8 o'clock.Then I washed my face and brushed my teeth.I cleaned my room too.I had breakfast at half past eight.And then I went for a walk in the park near my ...

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my sunday
today is sunday .I got up at 8 o'clock.Then I washed my face and brushed my teeth.I cleaned my room too.I had breakfast at half past eight.And then I went for a walk in the park near my home.I did my homework at ten o'clock.I had lunch at 12 o'clock.I went shopping in the afternoon.I also played computer games.In the evening,I watched TV. I went to bed at ten o'clock.
流水帐呀

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It's sunday today 要改成It"s SUNNY DAY

Yesterday was sunday
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