作业帮请点评一下我的作文请大家多提宝贵意见,文章写得不好请见笑!Ladies and gentlemen:Hello,everybody!My topic today is about friendship.As we know,the friendship often plays an important role in our life,and it need two sides to ca
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请点评一下我的作文请大家多提宝贵意见,文章写得不好请见笑!Ladies and gentlemen:Hello,everybody!My topic today is about friendship.As we know,the friendship often plays an important role in our life,and it need two sides to ca
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请大家多提宝贵意见,文章写得不好请见笑!Ladies and gentlemen:Hello,everybody!My topic today is about friendship.As we know,the friendship often plays an important role in our life,and it need two sides to care about each other.Now,how can we keep the friendship with our friends?At first,we should show our loyalties to our friends.For example,we had better keep the secret between you and your friends because doing this can make your friends think that you are worth making friends with.And then,honesty is also a very important favor which can make great influence in the friendship,i believe you can not stand your friends being unhonest.What is more,showing your respect to them is of great importance,everybody is equel and should receive respect.Finally,as a somebody's friend,you must learn to share happiness and sorrow.All right,that's all that i want to say,thank you!
请点评一下我的作文请大家多提宝贵意见,文章写得不好请见笑!Ladies and gentlemen:Hello,everybody!My topic today is about friendship.As we know,the friendship often plays an important role in our life,and it need two sides to ca
显然文笔写得很普通.完全都是陈述句的话一般都得不了很高的分数.作文中没出现语法错误.可以的话句子在开头写友谊的时候用强调句形式,那样对评改老师有一定的吸引力.文章的形式是演讲稿形式,这样写应该没什么大问题.但是一定要记住,文章时常在必须分段的时候果断分,避免段落过于冗长而让评委觉得乏味反而失去应得的分数.
文章写得很好.不错,25分的话（我们学校都25满分）可以得20分吧!