请您帮助修改我的英文resume,将另附送感谢分ANDY LIU456 Rose Ave Rosemead,CA 90120(714) 345-6711OBJECTIVE To obtain a system administrator position in a company EDUCATION  Bachelor of Science,Electrical EngineeringQingdao Univer

请您帮助修改我的英文resume,将另附送感谢分ANDY LIU456 Rose Ave Rosemead,CA 90120(714) 345-6711OBJECTIVE To obtain a system administrator position in a company EDUCATION  Bachelor of Science,Electrical EngineeringQingdao Univer
请您帮助修改我的英文resume,将另附送感谢分
ANDY LIU
456 Rose Ave Rosemead,CA 90120
(714) 345-6711
OBJECTIVE
To obtain a system administrator position in a company
EDUCATION
 Bachelor of Science,Electrical Engineering
Qingdao University of Technology,Wuhan,Qingdao,Degree June,2005.3.50/4.0 GPA
 Master of Science,Civil Engineering
California State University,Long Beach,US,Degree Dec,2011.3.60/4.0 GPA
RELATED COURSE WORK
 Harbor,Port,Waterway Design and Earthquake Engineering
 Green Building Systems and Data Mining Knowledge
 Plan and Control of Construction Project
 Construction Cost Estimating and Project Bidding Strategy
PROFESSIONAL EXPERIENCE
 2005-2007 Qingdao Port Corporation Limited Qingdao,China
Administrative Assistant
Responsible for office management,information systems,PC maintenance,and installation of software,coordinated actives related to listings,closings,and customer relations.Also assisted in construction design ,project management.
COMPUTER SKILLS
 Excellent skills in MS Word/Excel/PowerPoint/OneNote.
 Install,configure,upgrade,maintain Microsoft XP/VISTA/WIN7 operating system ,Mac OS,Linux,and build network between PCs.
 Familiar with MS Project and Oracle Primavera.
 Familiar with Matlab and Mathcad.
 Create basic database with MS Access.
 Design and build simple web pages.
SPECIAL SKILLS
Excellent communication skills in Chinese.
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请您帮助修改我的英文resume,将另附送感谢分ANDY LIU456 Rose Ave Rosemead,CA 90120(714) 345-6711OBJECTIVE To obtain a system administrator position in a company EDUCATION  Bachelor of Science,Electrical EngineeringQingdao Univer
没什么大错,但是有些地方你处理得不好
比如说,列出来的项目,必须是语法一致的,是名词,就都名词,不能用动词原型
RELATED COURSE WORK
 Harbor,Port,Waterway Design and Earthquake Engineering
 Green Building Systems and Data Mining Knowledge
 Plan and Control of Construction Project
 Construction Cost Estimating and Project Bidding Strategy
第三条的plan control就用的是动词,但是其他都是名词,最好改成名词,当然这两个词都有名词的意思,但是这里别人感觉就是都用了动词
这段Administrative Assistant
Responsible for office management,information systems,PC maintenance,and installation of software,coordinated actives related to listings,closings,and customer relations.Also assisted in construction design ,project management.
前面没什么问题,后面 Also assisted in construction design ,project management.就错了,这句话的意思是别人帮助你,因为你用的是assisted,别人认为这个被动态省略了主语和was,补上就是I was also assisted...所以你最好补全整个句子.如果这里补全主语了,那么你第一句responsible也要用完整的句子,不要就一个形容词开句,加个I was也可以.
COMPUTER SKILLS
 Excellent skills in MS Word/Excel/PowerPoint/OneNote.
 Install,configure,upgrade,maintain Microsoft XP/VISTA/WIN7 operating system ,Mac OS,Linux,and build network between PCs.
 Familiar with MS Project and Oracle Primavera.
 Familiar with Matlab and Mathcad.
 Create basic database with MS Access.
 Design and build simple web pages.
你这里明显写的是computer skills,那么后面列出来的,就应该是skill同级的单词,也就说应该是名词或者名词形式,除了第一条,其他都不是名词,familiar那两个还可以接受,至少不是动词,其他动词的都得改名词.
总的来说很不错啊,就是细节注意一下就好了,每一条都搭配好就没问题了

没什么错误啊很好！
我啰嗦一遍这是我翻译的
中文\
刘德华
456玫瑰大道罗斯米德，加州90120
fhas@gmail.com
（714）345-6711
目的
要获得一家公司的系统管理员的地位
教育
学士科学，电子工程
青岛科技大学，武汉，青岛，学位2005年6月。 3.50/4.0政府采购...

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没什么错误啊很好！
我啰嗦一遍这是我翻译的
中文\
刘德华
456玫瑰大道罗斯米德，加州90120
fhas@gmail.com
（714）345-6711
目的
要获得一家公司的系统管理员的地位
教育
学士科学，电子工程
青岛科技大学，武汉，青岛，学位2005年6月。 3.50/4.0政府采购协定
理学硕士，土木工程
加州州立大学长滩，美国，学位12月，2011年。 3.60/4.0政府采购协定
工作相关课程
港，港口，航道设计与地震工程
绿色建筑系统和数据挖掘知识
计划及建设项目用地控制
施工成本估算和项目招投标策略
专业经验
2005-2007年青岛港集团有限公司青岛，中国
行政助理
负责办公室管理，信息系统，电脑维修，安装软件，相关的上市，关闭协调活性，和客户关系。还协助施工图设计，项目管理。
计算机技能
具备良好的MS Word/ Excel中/ PowerPoint中/ OneNote中。
安装，配置，升级，维护Microsoft XP/VISTA/WIN7操作系统的Mac OS，Linux和PC之间建立网络。
熟悉MS Project和甲骨文普里马韦拉。
熟悉Matlab和Mathcad的。
创建与MS Access的基本数据库。
设计和建造简单的网页。
特殊技能
在中国良好的沟通技巧。
参考：
家具要求
英文的
The English to Chinese (Simplified)
Andy Lau
456 Rose Avenue, Rosemead, California 90120
fhas@gmail.com
(714) 345-6711
Objective
To obtain a position of the company's system administrator
Education
 Bachelor of Science, Electrical Engineering
Qingdao University of Science and Technology, Wuhan, Qingdao, graduate in June 2005. 3.50/4.0 GPA
 Master of Science, Civil Engineering
California State University, Long Beach, United States, the degree in December, 2011. 3.60/4.0 GPA
Work-related courses
 port, port, channel design and earthquake engineering
 green building systems and data mining knowledge
 plan and construction project control
 construction cost estimates and project bidding strategy
Professional experience
 2005-2007 Qingdao Port Group Co., Ltd. in Qingdao, China
Administrative Assistant
Responsible for office management, information systems, computer maintenance, installation software, related to the listing, close coordination of activity, and customer relations. Also assisted the construction design, project management.
Computer skills
 have good MS Word / Excel in / PowerPoint in / OneNote in.
 install, configure, upgrade and maintain Microsoft XP/VISTA/WIN7 operating system, Mac OS, Linux and PC networking between.
 familiar with Oracle, MS Project and Primavera.
 familiar with Matlab and Mathcad's.
 Create a basic database with MS Access.
 simple web page design and construction.
Special skills
Good communication skills in China.
Reference:
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