请大家帮忙修改一篇英语作文.On Sunday,I usually get up at 7:00.Then Iwash my face and brush my teeth.After I have breakfast,I go shopping with my mother.We go to thesupermarket by bus.We by some vegetables and take a bus return our home.W

请大家帮忙修改一篇英语作文.On Sunday,I usually get up at 7:00.Then Iwash my face and brush my teeth.After I have breakfast,I go shopping with my mother.We go to thesupermarket by bus.We by some vegetables and take a bus return our home.W
请大家帮忙修改一篇英语作文.
On Sunday,I usually get up at 7:00.Then Iwash my face and brush my teeth.After I have breakfast,
I go shopping with my mother.We go to thesupermarket by bus.We by some vegetables and take a bus return our home.Wehave noodle for our dinner.After dinner,I sleep for a little while.Then I domy homework from 14:00 to 17:00.After super,I watch TV or read some books.Igo to bed at 21:00.It’s my Sunday.
请大家指出里面的语法错误。

请大家帮忙修改一篇英语作文.On Sunday,I usually get up at 7:00.Then Iwash my face and brush my teeth.After I have breakfast,I go shopping with my mother.We go to thesupermarket by bus.We by some vegetables and take a bus return our home.W
1、这是叙述过去的事件,而且有准确的时间,因此全文的基本时态确定为一般过去时.用一般现在时不合适.
2、return 是动词,前面已经有了take a bus所以这里连续用动词是错误的,改为back home,这里没必要加our.
3、noodle一般用复数形式,改为noodles.
4、午餐是lunch,dinner改为lunch,和早餐晚餐保持一致.
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On Sunday,I usually got up at 7:00.Then I
washed my face and brushed my teeth.After I had breakfast,I went shopping
with my mother.We went to the supermarket by bus.We bought some vegetables
and took a bus back home.We had noodles for lunch.After lunch,I slept
for a little while.Then I did my homework from 14:00 to 17:00.After supper,I
watched TV or read some books.I went to bed at 21:00.It’s my Sunday.

lz你好
After I have breakfast,在这句后面接你下一个活动的时候最好用个then然后
还有那个买蔬菜，那个买是buy，不是by，这两个词同音而已。
吃面条应该用复数noodles
最后一个I watch TV or read some books. or改为and比较合适
最后一句可以改成I have a busy Sunday.面条不...

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lz你好
After I have breakfast,在这句后面接你下一个活动的时候最好用个then然后
还有那个买蔬菜，那个买是buy，不是by，这两个词同音而已。
吃面条应该用复数noodles
最后一个I watch TV or read some books. or改为and比较合适
最后一句可以改成I have a busy Sunday.

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第二行是buy，第三行是noodles，应该别的没什么了，不过你的星期天每次都是这样过吗？用这个时态就表示次次都是这样。

have a breakfast
we buy some vegetables and then take the same bus to return our home
we have noodles
I sleep for a while
楼主你都说after dinner了怎么还从下午2点写作业 是lunch吧
After super是啥？supper...

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have a breakfast
we buy some vegetables and then take the same bus to return our home
we have noodles
I sleep for a while
楼主你都说after dinner了怎么还从下午2点写作业 是lunch吧
After super是啥？supper 是晚宴，比较正式，一般dinner就行
而且我也觉得时态有点问题。不过小学就这样吧。

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On Sundays,....
We buy some vegetables....
take a bus home ( return home by bus )
We have noodles for our lunch(依后面的时间看，应是午饭)
After lunch,...
After supper,....
最后一句，最好改为That's my Sundays.

take a bus return少了一个to； noodles；逻辑错误，dinner是晚餐，这里根据文中意思应用lunch；After super？？；
It's这用的不好，建议用this is；不算你的部分打字错误，语法大错就这么多了，至于特别小的用词差别就不用细究了，估计写这篇文章的朋友应该也弄不懂.......

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take a bus return少了一个to； noodles；逻辑错误，dinner是晚餐，这里根据文中意思应用lunch；After super？？；
It's这用的不好，建议用this is；不算你的部分打字错误，语法大错就这么多了，至于特别小的用词差别就不用细究了，估计写这篇文章的朋友应该也弄不懂....

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应该没有问题，只是句式和用词太简单了