帮我检查一篇英语文章有什么语法错误吧~总觉得自己错了很多.希望亲们能尽量改完、、、In February 11,2010,it was to let each Nanjinger’s days of one’s blood boils with indignation.On that day,the International Oly

帮我检查一篇英语文章有什么语法错误吧~总觉得自己错了很多.希望亲们能尽量改完、、、In February 11,2010,it was to let each Nanjinger’s days of one’s blood boils with indignation.On that day,the International Oly
帮我检查一篇英语文章有什么语法错误吧~总觉得自己错了很多.希望亲们能尽量改完、、、
In February 11,2010,it was to let each Nanjinger’s days of one’s blood boils with indignation.On that day,the International Olympic Committee President Rogge proclaimed the second Summer Youth Olympic Games will be held in Nanjing.
Do you know what is the Youth Olympic Games It’s a stage,a very big stage,need us to participate in together.At this stage can not only show the athletes firm and indomitable will and the spirit of hard work,and also can display Nanjing style,our beautiful city Nanjing has a long history of culture and our Nanjing people’s self-confidence and indiscriminate love ,let the world know,understanding,and full in love with Nanjing.
The Youth Olympic Games is a big family.We need to hand in hand to build a bridge of friendship,to sow the seeds of love to each person’s hart.
So,from now on.Let’s together to along of footprints,to witness the torch light,to cheer for the Youth Olympic Games,for Nanjing together!
That’s all.
Thanks for listening.
这次参加比赛要用的...

帮我检查一篇英语文章有什么语法错误吧~总觉得自己错了很多.希望亲们能尽量改完、、、In February 11,2010,it was to let each Nanjinger’s days of one’s blood boils with indignation.On that day,the International Oly
首先第一个单词 应该是用 ON
第二段的强调句 THAT 是不能省略的吧!
AT 就不要了 this stage就好了
not only 后边接的应该是 but also
our beautiful city Nanjing has a long history of culture错误很严重 这是一个完整的句子 怎么可以和一些词组并列啊 应该改成 the long cultural history of our beautiful city
let the world know understand 不是understanding
We need to build a bridge of friendship showing the seeds of love to the hearts of everybody hand in hand..

[On] February 11, 2010, [ ] each Nanjinger’s blood boil[ed] with indignation. On that day, the International Olympic Committee President Rogge proclaimed [that] the second Summer Youth Olympic Games [...

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[On] February 11, 2010, [ ] each Nanjinger’s blood boil[ed] with indignation. On that day, the International Olympic Committee President Rogge proclaimed [that] the second Summer Youth Olympic Games [would] be held in Nanjing (feel like maybe if you put the date of the games here would be better?).
Do you know what the Youth Olympic Games [is]? It’s a stage, a very big stage[. It] need[s] us to participate [ ] together. [On] this stage[, we] can not only show the athletes['] firm and indomitable will and the[ir] [hard-working] spirit, [but] also [ ] display [our] Nanjing style[.] Our beautiful city, Nanjing, has a long history of culture. (details? like how long the history is, how it was the capital of several dynasties... you don't have to put them in but I would suggest so) And [the world will get to know and fall in love with] our Nanjing people’s self-confidence and indiscriminate love. (this is the biggest change I made, sometimes simpler is better)
[People participating in] The Youth Olympic Games [are] a big family. We need to [go] hand in hand to build a bridge of friendship, [and] to sow the seeds of love [in] each person’s h[e]art.
So, from now on, let’s [march] along [the] footprints, to witness the torch light, [and] to cheer for the Youth Olympic Games, for Nanjing together!
That’s all.
Thanks for listening.
(Hi, I don't know which grade you're in, but this is a great paper! I was amazed by the rich content and your extensive vocabulary, and I think you will do really well in the contest if you have enough time to practice. I made some changes to it, but they are mostly tiny grammatical mistakes. And I would suggest adding in some more details, just to make your paper more valuable, but everything is up to you. :) Last thing, good luck in the contest! )

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