请英语高手帮我点评这篇四级作文,Should the University Campus Be Open to Tourists?With the developing economic,more and more people go to travel to enter themselves.In this situation,the famous university is becomming the new point for t

请英语高手帮我点评这篇四级作文,Should the University Campus Be Open to Tourists?With the developing economic,more and more people go to travel to enter themselves.In this situation,the famous university is becomming the new point for t
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Should the University Campus Be Open to Tourists?
With the developing economic,more and more people go to travel to enter themselves.In this situation,the famous university is becomming the new point for travelling.
Whether the university should be opened to the tourists,different people support different ideas,Some don't agree with the idea the university is opened to tourists.They think that the universitses are doing education,not commerce.In their opinion,the tourists may give a bad effect to the students' study,even endanger the students.But on the other hand,the others think that if universiity is opened to tourists,it is not only useful for the school,but also for the students.The university can earn money through it and buy more studying device for students.
As far as I am corcerned,I prefer the idea that university should not be opened to tourists.The school is the place where students study,if there are tourists come to the school frequently,the students may feel boring.If the bad person come into the university as a tourist,there will have danger for the students'personnel safety.

请英语高手帮我点评这篇四级作文,Should the University Campus Be Open to Tourists?With the developing economic,more and more people go to travel to enter themselves.In this situation,the famous university is becomming the new point for t
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该大学校园是向游人开放? 经济的发展,越来越多的人去旅行进入自己…在这种情况下,这个著名的大学的新观点的上升。 是否应该向游客开放,不同的人有不同的想法,支持一些不同意这一观点的大学开设旅游他们认为所做的,而不是商业教育的. 在他们看来,游客们可以给学生一个坏的影响,甚至危及 '学习的学生但另一方面,其他人认为,如果向游客开放,它不仅是实用的学校,同时也为学生们大学可以赚到钱通过它与购买更多...

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该大学校园是向游人开放? 经济的发展,越来越多的人去旅行进入自己…在这种情况下,这个著名的大学的新观点的上升。 是否应该向游客开放,不同的人有不同的想法,支持一些不同意这一观点的大学开设旅游他们认为所做的,而不是商业教育的. 在他们看来,游客们可以给学生一个坏的影响,甚至危及 '学习的学生但另一方面,其他人认为,如果向游客开放,它不仅是实用的学校,同时也为学生们大学可以赚到钱通过它与购买更多的学生学习的装置。
至于我,我更喜欢这个主意,大学不应向游客开放。这个学校的学生学习的地方,有游客来到学校的学生经常会感到无聊,。假如我们能将不好的人进入大学的一名游客,将会有危险的学生 '人员的安全
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