英语比赛是自我介绍的问题我马上要参加一个英语比赛 之前要有自我介绍 我写了如下一段文章 ：Good afternoon every body,Do you know jordan or Yao Ming?Do youu know what their jobs are?Yes,this is basketball ,It is a

英语比赛是自我介绍的问题我马上要参加一个英语比赛 之前要有自我介绍 我写了如下一段文章 ：Good afternoon every body,Do you know jordan or Yao Ming?Do youu know what their jobs are?Yes,this is basketball ,It is a
英语比赛是自我介绍的问题
我马上要参加一个英语比赛 之前要有自我介绍 我写了如下一段文章 ：
Good afternoon every body,Do you know jordan or Yao Ming?Do youu know what their jobs are?Yes,this is basketball ,It is also my favourite,Although I am a grade 9 student and I am 16 years old,I am crazy about it ,I have many other hobbies too ,such as playing computer,running and swimming.I am glad to join this half final,I believe I can go farther ,this is me---(我的名字） Thank you
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英语比赛是自我介绍的问题我马上要参加一个英语比赛 之前要有自我介绍 我写了如下一段文章 ：Good afternoon every body,Do you know jordan or Yao Ming?Do youu know what their jobs are?Yes,this is basketball ,It is a
Good afternoon every body,Do you know jordan or Yao Ming?Do youu know what their jobs are?Yes,this is basketball ,It is also my favourite,Although I am a grade 9 student .I am crazy about it.Besides I have many other hobbies too ,such as playing computer,running swimming and so on.I am glad to join this half final,I believe I can go farther ,this is me---(我的名字） Thank you !
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因为你这篇文章不适合+年龄
有点不符合
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那就+在Good afternoon every body,之后
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Good afternoon every body, Do you know jordan or Yao Ming? Do you know what their jobs are? Yes, it is basketball, which is also my favorite sport. Although I am a grade 9 student and I am only 16 yea...

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Good afternoon every body, Do you know jordan or Yao Ming? Do you know what their jobs are? Yes, it is basketball, which is also my favorite sport. Although I am a grade 9 student and I am only 16 years old, I am crazy about it. Besides that, I also have many other hobbies, such as playing computer games, running, and swimming.I am glad to make it to the semi-finals, but I do believe that I can go farther. I am ---(我的名字） Thank you !

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