大家帮我看看,我这样的英语算是什么水平,自己写的~Dear Ms Joan,I am very glad to receive the telephone that you call me today to give me an opportunity for an interview.At first ,let me interduce myself .I am a college student that

大家帮我看看,我这样的英语算是什么水平,自己写的~Dear Ms Joan,I am very glad to receive the telephone that you call me today to give me an opportunity for an interview.At first ,let me interduce myself .I am a college student that
大家帮我看看,我这样的英语算是什么水平,自己写的~
Dear Ms Joan,
I am very glad to receive the telephone that you call me today to give me an opportunity for an interview.At first ,let me interduce myself .I am a college student that just graduate from a collage ,The collage is in Hangzhou which is located at Wensan Rode.I spent three years at school studying many courses,and my major is International Trade.It include about fourteen courses,such as Business English,Business law ,Computer,Accounting and Marketing.My hobby is sports,for example basketball and badminton.,because sports can make me in health.Although I have no practical experience,I once practice in Yuhang Internaional Co.,Ltd.during my summer holiday.I am interested in doing internaional trade,because it is so challenging.I know that when do international trade ,English is very very important.But for some reasons ,I even have't got any certificate abour English.I hope you would give me a chance.I will work hard,study hard from beginning.You can call me at anyt time,This is my telephone 1301234567.
因为我英语没有考过等级什么的，对自己没底，不是显摆~---不知道这个水平做外贸助理会行不行！确实我对自己的评估是没达到四级~就帮我评估，

大家帮我看看,我这样的英语算是什么水平,自己写的~Dear Ms Joan,I am very glad to receive the telephone that you call me today to give me an opportunity for an interview.At first ,let me interduce myself .I am a college student that
Dear Ms Joan,
It is my great pleasure to talk to you over the phone today.Your invitation for an interview is very much appreciated.
Please allow me to take this opportunity to brief you about myself.I am a new graduate from XXX college,(located on Wensan Road,HangZhou City.) (觉得没必要说学校在哪里) majoring in International Trade.In the 3 years of my study I successfully completed 14 courses,some of which are Business English,Business law,Computer,Accounting,and Marketing,just to say a few.The internship with Yuhang International Co.,Ltd.Further enhanced my knowledge gained from books and provided me with a real-life scenario of this challenging field.I am well aware that the level of English plays a key role in this position.However,without any certificate in English,I can hardly prove myself in terms of my English proficiency.I will endeavor to improve my English,to learn the professionalism in this industry.I am sure my hardworking and determination in achieving a goal will support me through any hardship of a job I may encounter should a chance is provided.
My personal spare time interest is sports and I would very much like to be a welcome part in your company’s social activities if I am lucky enough to work with you.
I can be reached at 1301234567.

不错. 有几个不对 但是 基本都还好, 努力啦.!

有些句子还有汉化倾向，比如第一句和最后一句，英语里是不这样说的

语法错误还是不少的，比如单复数问题，拼写，从句引导词。。。自己检查下巴。也有不少句子不自然。。。总之还算make sense..
ps.现在还有什么学校在问三路啊，不是都去下沙了么？？？

Your call to inform me of the interview today is very appreciative. Do allow me to introduce myself first.
I’ve just graduated from college(应将学校名称写出)in Hangzhou as an International Trade major. Du...

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Your call to inform me of the interview today is very appreciative. Do allow me to introduce myself first.
I’ve just graduated from college(应将学校名称写出)in Hangzhou as an International Trade major. During my 3 years’ college life, I benefited a lot through systematical learning on courses like Business English, Business law , Computer, Accounting and Marketing. To deepen my understanding in this field, I once worked with Yuhang International Co. Ltd. as an intern. I am so keen on the many challenges it provides.
Though my extracurricular activities vary a lot, sports is my favorite. It helps keep me fit and what else on earth is more important?
My English skill is not so excellent due to some reasons. However, I do believe diligence and talent can help make it!
You can reach me any time at 1301234567.
我帮楼主写了一遍,大体意思没变,但语言上做了不少灵活变通~~希望对你有帮助

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大体上的意思差不多，但是语言表达还是比较中文化，还需要继续学习才行，楼上是好心人哦！多多参考。

基本上达到6级水平。我过了6级，感觉没有你写的好。

恩 四级水平不到。做外贸的话要学习商务英语，你还缺乏很多英语的感觉。高中生的水平

高中英语水平。
最后回复的这篇大约是四级水平。

竟然还有错别字，你好好找找吧，句型太拖拉，不简练，好好缩写一下。你的水平不到4级，还需要锻炼

有几个错别字，语句不够流利

感觉语言单一，虽然我英语水平一般，一看你的就知道是中国人写，

同意tianhl1230的说法
一看就知道是中国人写的
写英文不要字句翻译,我的同学都说伱的句子很生硬
那位0cathrine0 的完全don't make sence. omg, he is a dude.
damn! If you don't konw English, would you please DO NOT teach other people Eng...

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同意tianhl1230的说法
一看就知道是中国人写的
写英文不要字句翻译,我的同学都说伱的句子很生硬
那位0cathrine0 的完全don't make sence. omg, he is a dude.
damn! If you don't konw English, would you please DO NOT teach other people English. What the hell, a stupid stuff....
ps I am from America....

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不光作为英语，作为一门语言也太罗嗦了，建议好好提高整体的语言水平