求英语高手看一下作文语法有没有错,（很简单的作文）MyselfHello everyone!I’m thirteen-year-old.I’m in Class one Grade seven.I’m thirteen-year-old.My birthday is on February 1st.There are four people in my family.They are my

求英语高手看一下作文语法有没有错,（很简单的作文）MyselfHello everyone!I’m thirteen-year-old.I’m in Class one Grade seven.I’m thirteen-year-old.My birthday is on February 1st.There are four people in my family.They are my
求英语高手看一下作文语法有没有错,（很简单的作文）
Myself
Hello everyone!I’m thirteen-year-old.I’m in Class one Grade seven.I’m thirteen-year-old.My birthday is on February 1^st.There are four people in my family.They are my father,my mother,my litter brother and I.I have many habits.My favorite colors are blue and white.I love eat very much.So,I like all the delicious food.My favorite sports is swimming.And my favorite subjects are Chinese,math and English.Thats what I am.Do you want to be my friends?
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求英语高手看一下作文语法有没有错,（很简单的作文）MyselfHello everyone!I’m thirteen-year-old.I’m in Class one Grade seven.I’m thirteen-year-old.My birthday is on February 1st.There are four people in my family.They are my
修改版（好吧我英语也很烂）
Myself
Hello everyone!I’m thirteen-year-old.I’m in Class one Grade seven.My birthday is on February 1st.There are four people in my family：my father,my mother,my younger brother and I.I have many hobbies.For example,i like swimming very much.My favorite colors are blue and white,they makes me look cool!I love eating very much.So,I like all the delicious food.And my favorite subjects are Chinese,maths and English.Do you want to be my friends?

I’m thirteen-year-old 错误 thirteen-year-old是形容词，可以改成a thirteen-year-old boy/girl 或thirteen years old
I love eat very much. 应该是love eating

I love eat very much.love后只接 to do,或doing.总体没大错误。

MYSELF如果是题目的话,不推荐. 可参考题目:SELF-INTRODUCTION, 或者，SOMETHING YOU SHOULD KNOW ABOUT ME.
两句 I AM 13 YEARS OLD. 重复了。而且开场白直接说年龄怪怪的。建议直接说生日，I WAS BORN ON FEB. 1ST, THE YEAR OF XXXX. I'M 13 YEARS OLD ON GRA...

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MYSELF如果是题目的话,不推荐. 可参考题目:SELF-INTRODUCTION, 或者，SOMETHING YOU SHOULD KNOW ABOUT ME.
两句 I AM 13 YEARS OLD. 重复了。而且开场白直接说年龄怪怪的。建议直接说生日，I WAS BORN ON FEB. 1ST, THE YEAR OF XXXX. I'M 13 YEARS OLD ON GRADE 7, CLASS 1.
THERE ARE 4 PEOPLE IN MY FAMILY. THEY ARE MY DAD, MOM, YOUNGER BROTHER(LITTLE也说得过去，younger更挑不出毛病) AND ME. （MY可以省略一些，不用每次都说；说自己的时候最好用ME，当然用 I 也没有错。）
I HAVE MANY HABITS. (HABBITS 还是 HOBBIES？看后面的描述，好像HOBBIES更贴切。) MY FAVORITE COLORS ARE BLUE AND WHITE. I LOVE TO EAT. (LOVE和EAT都是动词，不能连在一起) SO I LIKE ALL THE DELICIOUS FOOD.
不一定都用 " I "开头，也可以倒过来说。SWIMMING IS MY FAVORITE SPORT.
THAT'S WHO I AM.
YOU指的是一群人，还是一个人？FRIENDS应不应该加S?
如果不用从句的话，简单句型之间应该尽量增强逻辑关系。

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