哪位大神帮忙看看我的这篇文章的语法或者其他地方有没有问题,3QHello everyone,I am your new classmate.We can learn togher.I feel so happy.Well,my name is Weijia.As you can see,I have short hair,just like a boy.My eyes are not

哪位大神帮忙看看我的这篇文章的语法或者其他地方有没有问题,3QHello everyone,I am your new classmate.We can learn togher.I feel so happy.Well,my name is Weijia.As you can see,I have short hair,just like a boy.My eyes are not
哪位大神帮忙看看我的这篇文章的语法或者其他地方有没有问题,3Q
Hello everyone,I am your new classmate.We can learn togher.I feel so happy.Well,my name is Weijia.As you can see,I have short hair,just like a boy.My eyes are not big enough.I guess most of you like the big.Because that looked becatiful and loveely.
My favorite color is green,it represents the youth.I like style of music is country music.So,Taylor Swift is my love.And I usually draw some cartoon characters in the boring time.
I like to make friends.I hope we can get alone happy.
Thank you for listening my self introduction.

哪位大神帮忙看看我的这篇文章的语法或者其他地方有没有问题,3QHello everyone,I am your new classmate.We can learn togher.I feel so happy.Well,my name is Weijia.As you can see,I have short hair,just like a boy.My eyes are not
基本可以,大致帮你润色一些：
Hello everyone,I'm really glad to have such chance here to introduce myself.My name is ...As you can see,I have short hair,just like a boy.Perhaps most of you like the big eyes.But I have to say my eyes are not big enough to make you feel lovely.
My favourite colour is green,it represents youth.The music style I like most is country music and ...is my best love.I usually spend my leisure time drawing cartoon characters in the boring time.
I like to make friends with you and hope we can get alone well / happily.
Thanks for listening.
有几点建议：1.自我介绍一般不介绍缺点,略微幽默式自嘲可以,但需把握个度.
2.句式需再严谨一些,你那句“喜欢的音乐风格”显然不是句子,作为短语结构也较混乱.至于 最后一句话的语病,你仔细看一下,也能发觉,我不在赘述.
3.用词尽量地道,空余时间多用“spare time 或 liesure time.”boring time 很少有人这样用,硬凑“无聊的时间”这是“Chinese English" 的思维模式.

together写错了。just like a boy 前加which .like the big 改为like big eyes(个人觉得其实这句话很多余。。） that looked 改为that's .beautiful ,lovely 写错了。。I like (音乐这儿） 改为My favorite.
so 改为and ,去逗号。。in the boring time 改为duri...

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together写错了。just like a boy 前加which .like the big 改为like big eyes(个人觉得其实这句话很多余。。） that looked 改为that's .beautiful ,lovely 写错了。。I like (音乐这儿） 改为My favorite.
so 改为and ,去逗号。。in the boring time 改为during my free time. get along 不是alone.happy 改为happily.
非常认真的在帮你改，不容易啊。。。

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基本可以 改几处 小毛病
Hello everyone,I am your new classmate. From now on we can learn together. I feel so happy. Well, my name is Weijia. As you can see, I have short hair, just like a boy. My eyes are n...

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基本可以 改几处 小毛病
Hello everyone,I am your new classmate. From now on we can learn together. I feel so happy. Well, my name is Weijia. As you can see, I have short hair, just like a boy. My eyes are not big enough. I guess most of you like bigger ones,for one looks becatiful and lovely with big eyes.
My favorite color is green,it represents the youth.the kind of music I like is country music. So, Taylor Swift is my love. And I usually draw some cartoon characters in boring time.
I like to make friends.I hope we can get along well.
Thank you for listening to me.

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语法都有人改了，我就说一些其他的。其实有很多不错的结尾。比如：Thank you for your attention.
Many thanks for your listening.

第三行big后加个ones looked的ed去掉，不需要过去式，可理解为事实真理~
第四行第三句改为定语从句the style of music i like,你的语法错了~
倒数第二行 get along 相处~
这篇自我介绍肯定会很出彩O(∩_∩)O哈哈~