求大神帮我看下这段英语对不对,并修改一下This summer vacation, I watched a moviecalled “ Homeless to Harvard”.A movie about Liz Murray reality, atouching inspirational videos. This movie is talking about a girl was born inthe Uni

求大神帮我看下这段英语对不对,并修改一下This summer vacation, I watched a moviecalled “ Homeless to Harvard”.A movie about Liz Murray reality, atouching inspirational videos. This movie is talking about a girl was born inthe Uni
求大神帮我看下这段英语对不对,并修改一下
This summer vacation, I watched a moviecalled “ Homeless to Harvard”.
A movie about Liz Murray reality, atouching inspirational videos. This movie is talking about a girl was born inthe United States of America'sslums. Her family is very terrible. When she was 8 years old, she decided to wanderin the corner of the city with her friend. They slept in the subway station,steal food in supermarket. One day, her friend can’t stand this life, lefther.
With the growing slowly, Liz knew, onlyreading success can change the fate of its own. She began to study; she used 2years, finished four years courses of Senior High School.
This storygives me power, even it might seen crazy. I do thing that I haven’t do thatbefore, I might say:“I can’t! I will not finish this!”After the movie, I know that: Nothingis impossible, depending on how much you pay.

求大神帮我看下这段英语对不对,并修改一下This summer vacation, I watched a moviecalled “ Homeless to Harvard”.A movie about Liz Murray reality, atouching inspirational videos. This movie is talking about a girl was born inthe Uni
修改后：
Last summer vacation,I watched a film named "Homeles to Harvad".This movie is about Liz Murray's life.This is a touching inspirational video.This movie is takling about a girl whose name is Liz Murray and she was born in a slum which is in The United States.Her family is very terrible.When she was 8years old,she decided to wander the sity with her friends.They slept in the subway station,stealing food from a supermarket.One day,her freidns couldn't stand this life anymore.So,they left alone .
When she frew up,Liz knew that she could only change her life by achieving education success.She began to study;she used 2years to finish a four-year-courses in Senior High School.
This story gave me power,even though it might seen like crazy.I did things that i didn't do /hadn't done before.After watching the film,I knew that nothing in impossible.It is just depending on how much you pay or do.
有些地方已经经过修改了咯,仔细看好来哦!

在英文中是没有冒号的。

This summer vacation, I watched a movie called “ Homeless to Harvard”，a a touching inspirational movie. It is about a girl named Liz Murray who was born in the United States of America'sslums.When ...

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This summer vacation, I watched a movie called “ Homeless to Harvard”，a a touching inspirational movie. It is about a girl named Liz Murray who was born in the United States of America'sslums.When she was 8 years old, she decided to wanderin the corner of the city with her friend. They slept in the subway station,steal food in supermarket. One day, her friend can’t stand this life and left her.
Growing slowly, Liz bagan to realize that only reading can change the fate of its own. She began to study; it took her 2years to finish four years courses of Senior High School.
This story gives me power, even it might seem crazy. I do thing that I haven’t do thatbefore, I might say:“I can’t! I will not finish this!”After the movie, I know that: Nothingis impossible, it depends on how much you pay.最后一段太中文式了。
改的很辛苦的，一定要选我啊，拜托了！

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