英语短文求查错啊!

英语短文求查错啊!
英语短文求查错啊!

英语短文求查错啊!
This is my alarm clock,It is blue and white.这里的Blue and white是要表达什么意思?蓝白相间?如果是的话请用blue-and-white,做为组合整体用.
It is not only very pratical ,but also a good friend of my life.这句有问题,不用这么复杂的句子,容易造成误解.可以简化:It is very pratical,and also a good friend in my life..
Because it told me to get up on time.这里不要用过去式,因为这是一个经常的常态的表达,同时不用Tell,用call或awake up好一些,改为:
Because it call me to get up on time everyday.或者 Becase it awake up me on time everyday.
So,I will not be late,It is very interesting,isn't it?这句本身倒没有什么问题.不过结合前后句我们只能看出它是很有用的useful,但没有看出Interesting,可能个人看法不同.后面你又改为 It is very interesting,I love my alarm clock.我认为如果能加上几句有趣的描述就更好了.比如闹铃声the ring,or the song.
好了,就是以上这些了,你写的已经很不错了,希望让你更完美哦.

This is my alarm clock. It is blue and white. It is not only very pratical, but it also is a good friend of mine. It wakes me up on time everyday, so I will not be late. It is very interesting. I love my alarm clock.

其它没啥问题，everyday应该改成every day
*everyday 形容词：每天的, 日常的, 平常的, 平凡的
例：a suit for everyday wear.
适合平日里穿的衣服
*every day 通常做“每天”解作状语时，省掉介词（in),表示频率。
I go to school every day.我每天上学
He exe...

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其它没啥问题，everyday应该改成every day
*everyday 形容词：每天的, 日常的, 平常的, 平凡的
例：a suit for everyday wear.
适合平日里穿的衣服
*every day 通常做“每天”解作状语时，省掉介词（in),表示频率。
I go to school every day.我每天上学
He exercises every day. 他每天锻炼

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该短文基本没有语法，拼写上的错误，只是太单调，小句子过多。下面的是我改善过的
This ia my alarm clock. It is blue and white. It is not only very practical, but also a good friend of my life for it can tell me to get up on time everytime...

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该短文基本没有语法，拼写上的错误，只是太单调，小句子过多。下面的是我改善过的
This ia my alarm clock. It is blue and white. It is not only very practical, but also a good friend of my life for it can tell me to get up on time everytime so that I will not be late for school! It is very very interesting and I love my alarm clock.

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