请英语大神看一下下面这篇英语读后感有没有错误啊……?The Shawshank RedemptionToday I watch the movie called The Shawshank Redemption.It is educational movie and it have great influence on me.I think about this movie whole day.T

请英语大神看一下下面这篇英语读后感有没有错误啊……?The Shawshank RedemptionToday I watch the movie called The Shawshank Redemption.It is educational movie and it have great influence on me.I think about this movie whole day.T
请英语大神看一下下面这篇英语读后感有没有错误啊……?
The Shawshank Redemption
Today I watch the movie called The Shawshank Redemption.It is educational movie and it have great influence on me.I think about this movie whole day.
The movie tell a story about a smart banker called Andy Dufresne.He was thought kill his wife and her lover.Due to it,he was sent to prison but he was innocent.In the prison called Shawshank ,he meets a lot of prisoner and make friends with them,include his best friend-Red.During the time that he live in the prison,has a lot of things and difficulties.And Andy become the account of warden from a common prisoner.And finally he got away from the prison and obtain the freedom.
there is a word from the beginning to end of the movie - HOPE,hope is a very important thing,it can make you keep yourself to yourself and give you power when you are in difficulties,as Andy said that hope is good thing,maybe the best of things.And no good thing ever dies.If Andy didn't have the hope for freedom ,he maybe live in prison forever or like Brooks.
And friendship is another thing that the movie told us.friendship is our base of our life,friends can give you a lot of help when when you need them.For example,Red help andy get a hammer ,poster and other things,and them make Andy can get away from the prison.But if Andy didn't bring beer for his coworkers,if he didn't help other prisoner,how can he make a lot friends help him?So,friends is helpful,and friendship is a kind of power.
Freedom is common but precious.We should cherish freedom and don't lose hope for freedom anytime.It was the base of Andy 's hope.
In a word,The Shawshank Redemption is a excellent movie,It’s a powerful story of hope,friendship and freedom.

请英语大神看一下下面这篇英语读后感有没有错误啊……?The Shawshank RedemptionToday I watch the movie called The Shawshank Redemption.It is educational movie and it have great influence on me.I think about this movie whole day.T
1.注意时态和第三人称单数
发生过的最好用过去时,today I watched; 描述性的句子用一般现在时没错,不过需要注意第三人称单数,it has great influence on me.The movie tells a story...freinds are helpful
讲剧情,要么都用过去时,要么都用现在时,不能一会儿过去,一会儿现在,这个你统一改下
2.注意冠词的用法,it's an eductional movie.I have been thinking of the movie the whole day.
3.注意动词结构的用法
He was thought killing his wife
4.宾格不能做主语,them 改为they make 或which makes Anydy get away from the prison,
整体而言,词汇与句子的应用与组织方面很棒,内容非常好,会是个高分的文章,就是以上是一些基本的语法点,今后请多注意

有啊
第一段 It is an educational...
and it has...
第二段the movie tells....
and makes friends(为什么不用过去式)
and andy becomes（我很纠结你为什么不用过去式）
（而且...

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有啊
第一段 It is an educational...
and it has...
第二段the movie tells....
and makes friends(为什么不用过去式)
and andy becomes（我很纠结你为什么不用过去式）
（而且你后面又用了过去式）and finally he gets away(就用过去式会好一些)
第三段 那个when you are in difficulties 是肿么回事？in trouble 吧，这个我也不是很清楚

你的时态目测好混乱，到底是过去式还是现在式，不能混用呀
我都看晕了

最后一段 is an excellent movie

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第一横 it have（it是第三人称单数，应该改为it has）
第四到第五横 he meets(讲故事用的是过去时，应该改为 he met )
第五到第六横he live 改成 he lived(理由同上)
第九横difficulties （困难不可数，改成difficulty）
第十三横 两个when去掉一个 andy 是人名，第一个字母大写...

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第一横 it have（it是第三人称单数，应该改为it has）
第四到第五横 he meets(讲故事用的是过去时，应该改为 he met )
第五到第六横he live 改成 he lived(理由同上)
第九横difficulties （困难不可数，改成difficulty）
第十三横 两个when去掉一个 andy 是人名，第一个字母大写
第十五横 a lot friends a lot 没这种用法，改为 a lot of friends。
大致就是这样了，你再看下。 求采纳

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