求雅思老师改一下我的作文!我月底就要靠雅思了,结果作文还不会写,好不容易码出来一篇线形图,求大神给点意见,我还有各种柱状饼状木有解决,求大神给我指教.The picture is on P29 of IELTs5The char

求雅思老师改一下我的作文!我月底就要靠雅思了,结果作文还不会写,好不容易码出来一篇线形图,求大神给点意见,我还有各种柱状饼状木有解决,求大神给我指教.The picture is on P29 of IELTs5The char
求雅思老师改一下我的作文!
我月底就要靠雅思了,结果作文还不会写,好不容易码出来一篇线形图,求大神给点意见,我还有各种柱状饼状木有解决,求大神给我指教.
The picture is on P29 of IELTs5
The chart indicates the proportion of the population aged 65 and over during a century period from 1940 in Japan, Sweden and USA.
In 1940, the proportion of aged 65 or more in Japan was the lowest standing at 5%. Next comes Sweden, which stayed in the middle proportion generally(approximately) 7%.
The figure for the USA is the largest, which is about 9%.
However, in around 1990 , the figure for Western countries increased to about 15% while , the figure for Japan dropped to about 2.5%
You can also see the expected percentages from some fluctuation in this chart. The proportion of older people will be likely to increase from 2020 to 2040 in the three countries. As this chart shown , a dramatic change will happen between 2030 and 2040 in Japan, whose figure will grow from 10% to 27%. Also, at that time ,the proportion of the three country will be similar among each other.

求雅思老师改一下我的作文!我月底就要靠雅思了,结果作文还不会写,好不容易码出来一篇线形图,求大神给点意见,我还有各种柱状饼状木有解决,求大神给我指教.The picture is on P29 of IELTs5The char
没看到图,而且不是老师,你参考一下：
（我猜这个图显示了从1940年起的100年间,在三个国家中,65岁以上老龄化人口所占总人口比例的变化趋势）
This chart includes the statistical figures, which indicate the propotion of the aging people, 65+ years old, of the totoal population in Japan, Sweden and USA, during a 100 years' time frame started from 1940.
According to this chart, the figure of Japan in 1940, 5%, stands the lowest point among the three countries; the figure of USA, 9%, is the largest, and the figure of Sweden, 7%, stands in the middle.
However, the figure of Sweden and USA increased to 15% during 1990's, while in case of Japan, the figure dropped to 2.5%.
This chart also demonstrates the trent in the coming years. For example, in all three countries, the propotion of the aging people is most likely to increase to a similar level, while Japan stands the greastest increase, from 10% to 27% in a decade from 2030 to 2040.