偶写的一篇作文~My name is Angle.I'm twelve and I am in Xinhua Middle School,China.This is my school day.I get up at six o'clock in the morning and have breakfast at half past six.Because my school isn't near to my house,I go to school at seven

偶写的一篇作文~My name is Angle.I'm twelve and I am in Xinhua Middle School,China.This is my school day.I get up at six o'clock in the morning and have breakfast at half past six.Because my school isn't near to my house,I go to school at seven
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My name is Angle.I'm twelve and I am in Xinhua Middle School,China.This is my school day.I get up at six o'clock in the morning and have breakfast at half past six.Because my school isn't near to my house,I go to school at seven o'clock.We have four lessons in the morning.My favourite lesson is Chinese .At half past eleven,we go home and have lunch.
Lessons start in the afternoon at half past one.We have four lessons in the aftermoon .We go home at twenty to five.
In the evening,we watch TV and have dinner.I do my homework at eight o'clock and go to bed at ten o'clock.

偶写的一篇作文~My name is Angle.I'm twelve and I am in Xinhua Middle School,China.This is my school day.I get up at six o'clock in the morning and have breakfast at half past six.Because my school isn't near to my house,I go to school at seven
语法上基本没有错.不错,不错,有些句子再改得地道些就更好了.
my school isnt close to my house=my school isnt near my house

Because my school isn't near to my house-> Because my school isn't near my house
Lessons start in the afternoon at half past one->Lessons in the afternoon start at half past one
其他错误没有，不过太生硬了

My shchool day is very busy.On my school day,I usually get up at six o'clock in the morning and then have breakfast. Since my house is far from my school,I have to leave for school at seven o'clock. T...

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My shchool day is very busy.On my school day,I usually get up at six o'clock in the morning and then have breakfast. Since my house is far from my school,I have to leave for school at seven o'clock. There are four lessons in the morning. My favourite lesson is Chinese .At half past eleven, we go home and have lunch.
Lessons start at half past one. I have another four lessons in the afternoon .I usually leave school at twenty to five.
In the evening, I watch TV and have dinner.Then I start doing my homework. I go to bed at ten o'clock.
How busy my school day is!
由于写的是学校生活，所以不用自我介绍

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My name is Angle.I'm twelve and I am in Xinhua Middle School,China.This is my school day. I get up at six o'clock in the morning and have breakfast at half past six. Because my school isn't near to my...

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My name is Angle.I'm twelve and I am in Xinhua Middle School,China.This is my school day. I get up at six o'clock in the morning and have breakfast at half past six. Because my school isn't near to my house,I go to school at seven o'clock. We have four lessons in the morning. My favourite lesson is Chinese .At half past eleven, we go home and have lunch.
Lessons start in the afternoon at half past one. We have four lessons in the aftermoon .We go home at twenty to five.
In the evening, we watch TV and have dinner. I do my homework at eight o'clock and go to bed at ten o'clock.

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Lessons start in the afternoon at half past one. ->In the afternoon lessons start at half past one
We have four lessons in the aftermoon too.
And we go home at twenty to five.
适当加上一些连词会没那么生硬