高手来修改英文文章语法错误When I knew about financial events like the South Sea Bubble and Mississippi Bubble from book for the first fime,I was deeply shocked by the facts that these companies' stock price could abnormally rise so many

高手来修改英文文章语法错误When I knew about financial events like the South Sea Bubble and Mississippi Bubble from book for the first fime,I was deeply shocked by the facts that these companies' stock price could abnormally rise so many
高手来修改英文文章语法错误
When I knew about financial events like the South Sea Bubble and Mississippi Bubble from book for the first fime,I was deeply shocked by the facts that these companies' stock price could abnormally rise so many times more in such a short period and so many people,even intelligent like great Isaac Newton ended in failure in this fanaticism.This experience that opened my eyes to the wide world of Finance.
With curiosity I took a shot at investing stock in 2003,and the result proved that I still have many things to learn about finance.
To find out the reasonable answers haunting in my mind:what factors causes the fluctuation of the stock market; why the stock prices vary every second; what indexes fix the stock prices of different corporations,every week I take certain time to read books and magazines in the fields of finance and economics in the library since 2003,sometimes also read some biographies of relative authors,which make their profound theories looks more cordial and easy to understand to me.
And as a student who received both Associate's degree and Bachelor's degree from Shanghai Sanda University(SSU),one of the best private universities in China,I had a good opportunity in enhancing my knowledge background in fields of finance and Economics.I learned higher mathematics,both macro economics and micro economics,finance,accounting and some other relative courses in my five years college life and always be a frequent visitor to teachers' office.With the continuous communication with teachers,together with a few my classmates I got an opportunity to participate in the translation of the academic articles written by the teacher in International Finance who become the vice-president of our business school and my referee at a later time.
In winter vocation of 2006,I got the internship in Credit Management Department of Shanghai Pudong Development Branch(SPDB),Bank of China; my major responsibility was to assist in making statements,draw charts,and statistics.This experience,for the first time,let me obtain the opportunity in experiencing economic and financial knowledge out of books,and get a further understanding in three aspects:how to implement monetary policy,monitor financial market,and ensure the stability of financial market.This experience attracted me deeply and ignited my desire of taking my career in financial field.

高手来修改英文文章语法错误When I knew about financial events like the South Sea Bubble and Mississippi Bubble from book for the first fime,I was deeply shocked by the facts that these companies' stock price could abnormally rise so many
第一段的第二排：from the books(book是可数名词,要加冠词或者变成复数)
第一段倒数第二排：ended in failure 改成 ended up in failure 可能更好一点
第一段最后一句：This experience that opened my eyes to the wide world of Finance.那个 that 最好删掉比较好 不然句子意思和语法上有点问题
第二段：and the result proved that I still have many things to learn about finance.这个地方的have改成 had 比较好一点 因为前面是proved,过去时.一般情况下主句和从句谓语动词的时态要一致.
第三段第一排：causes 要改成 cause.因为前面是复数的 factor ,主谓要一致
第三段第三排：certain time 是 某个时间 的意思,你是想表达这个意思吗?如果是想说“一些时间”的话用 some time 比较好一点
第三段第三排：I take 改成 I spend 比较好一点.一般的说法是sb spends...(多少时间,多少钱) on/doing sth 或者是it/sth takes sb ...(多少时间,多少钱) to do sth.这个地方既然是I做主语,用spend比用take好一点.要注意的是 如果变成I spend...的话,后面的read也要变成reading,这个是spend这个词的用法要求的.
第三段倒数第三排：since 2003 这个地方的since（自从）是要求使用完成时的一个明显的标志.所以如果用since的话,语法上前面的动词也要变成完成时,而且还只能用可延续性的动词.
第三段最后一个句子：which make their profound theories looks more cordial and easy to understand to me.你这个地方是想用一个非限制性定语从句吗,如果是这样的话make应该改成makes,因为定语从句中的主语which是指的之前的的那个句子的内容,是一个抽象的单数意义,所以其谓语用单数可能会更好一些,还有就是那个looks要改成look,因为make后面的动词不加不定式,不加三人称单数形式,一般用动词原型就可以了,但是其实我觉得这个look也可以删去不用,这样反而比较简洁,而意义其实也没有什么区别.Easy的比较级是easier,而不是more easy,所以要改成more codial and easier for me to understand.
这段话改动得比较多我给你完整的改一下吧
I have been spending some time reading books and magazines in the fields of finance and economics in the library every week since 2003.Sometimes I also read some biographies of relative authors,which makes their profound theories more cordial and easier for me to understand.
第四段第一排：Associate's degree 改成 the associate degree 或者 Asoociate Degree 大专文凭
第四段第五排：in my five years college life 改成 in my five-year college life
第四段第五排最后：always be a frequent visitor to teachers' office.
这个地方be有问题,没有情态动词,又没有动词不定式的to,没必要用动词原型的,改成I was比较好一点 而且 always 和 frequent 意义上有一点重复.Office 是普通的可数名词,要加冠词
I was a frequent visitor to the teachers' office.
第四段第七排：with a few my classmates改成 with a few of my classmates.
第四段倒数第二排：who become,应该是用三人称单数的,用 who has become比较好
第五段第一排：In winter vocation of 2006 改成 In the winter vacation of 2006,加上the,因为是特指2006年的寒假
第五段第二排最后：to assist in making statements,draw charts,and statistic.draw改成 drawing,因为其实draw这个动词也是在 in之后的,和making并列,所以也要变成-ing形式.
to assist in making statements and drawing charts and statistic
基本就是这些了 其实有些细节的地方和小词还可以再推敲一下的 但是这样就麻烦多了 也不方便写出来 有时间的话自己再稍微润色一下吧 不改的话也没关系的 基本意思写的还算是很清楚的
写了那么多 真累……选我哦~!