评价一下这篇英语大作文Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged.Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults.One of the problem that is highly

评价一下这篇英语大作文Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged.Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults.One of the problem that is highly
评价一下这篇英语大作文
Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged.Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults.
One of the problem that is highly dabatable in today's socitey is whether children should be taught a sense of competition or cooperation on becoming useful adults.As far as I concerned,these two factors are both necessary for chidren.
The sense of competition which we have been encouraged for thousands of time since we were in elemetary school.Those children who have this feeling tend to peform much better than those do not have in many subjects such as P.E,Math,and history.It has became the source power of personal development to those people.It is believed that if everyone had became competitive in school,the quality and level of the class would soar up.Therefore,we should teach children a sense of competition because competiton would greatly advance children's abilties in many aspescts.

评价一下这篇英语大作文Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged.Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults.One of the problem that is highly
As to the problems suggested above,some people argue that a certain extent of competition among children should be encouraged while others don't think so.They hold that co-operation rather than competition are vital element that can make children a better student.As far as I am concerned,these twofactors are both necessary for chidren.
Ever since we remain as an elementary student,we were taught the notion of competition.Our teachers and parents ever and ever again imparted the truth that if you don't work hard ,you will be lagged down far away from others andlooked down upon by them ..Exactly under the influence by their words,Those children who have this feeling tend to peform much better than the rest of theirsin many subjects such as P.E,Math,and history.Owing to this,sprit of competitiveness can not be overstated in their eyes.,Then when it comes to the collective development led by personal progress,It is believed that if everyone had became competitive in school,the quality and level of the class would soar up.Therefore,we should teach children a sense of competition because competiton would greatly advance children's abilties in many aspects.

这样的类型的作文还是常考的类型。主要是两个观点，最后加上自己的观点。我看你这个有几个语法错误，还有就是你自己的观点只是说了竞争，后边就没有提合作，但是你前边说了两者都是中药的。有点前后观点不一致的感觉

下午邦你改，内容好，改一下句子结构