这是我写的英语读后感 请各位大师帮忙看看有没有什么语法错误 Reading after Aladdin’s lampThis holiday,I read a book named “Aladdin and the Enchanted Lamp”.It is a famous fairy tale written by an English author named Jud

这是我写的英语读后感 请各位大师帮忙看看有没有什么语法错误 Reading after Aladdin’s lampThis holiday,I read a book named “Aladdin and the Enchanted Lamp”.It is a famous fairy tale written by an English author named Jud
这是我写的英语读后感 请各位大师帮忙看看有没有什么语法错误
Reading after Aladdin’s lamp
This holiday,I read a book named “Aladdin and the Enchanted Lamp”.It is a famous fairy tale written by an English author named Judith Dean.It tells us a story about how a “good-for-nothing” man becomes to a rich man by an enchanted lamp.
The story is like this:When Aladdin was a boy,he just wants to play.He talked and laughed and played with his friends all day.
By chance,he got the enchanted lamp from a magician named Abanazar.And used it to get food and money.Soon,Aladdin and his mother were very rich.
Five years later,he married the Sultan’s daughter.They lived very happily.
But soon,Abanazar came back and deceived the lamp from the princess.And snatched the palace and the princess.But Aladdin rescued the princess and took the lamp away.Afterwards,Aladdin and his princess lived happily
I think,Aladdin is really a bad boy.He is so lazy and did not do any work.His mother always says to him:“You are a lazy boy!”Yes,Aladdin is really lazy.But in our real life,we can’t do the things like Aladdin.Everybody has many wishes,but we can’t just want to find short ways.We should believe ourselves.We should work hard by ourselves.If we just want to rely on others,we will be good-for-nothing.So believe ourselves,we’re the jinnee of ourselves.

这是我写的英语读后感 请各位大师帮忙看看有没有什么语法错误 Reading after Aladdin’s lampThis holiday,I read a book named “Aladdin and the Enchanted Lamp”.It is a famous fairy tale written by an English author named Jud
错误比较多,建议从新写!
读后感是Thoughts on Reading
enchanted lamp 建议改为 a lamp with tremendous magical power
He talked and laughed and played with his friends all day.建议改为 He was playing tricks with his friends every day.
By chance 建议改为By an accidental chance
were very rich 建议改为 were getting rich.

第4行 become后面不用to
第2段 When Aladdin was a boy was改为is，后面也全部改为一般现在时
第4段 deceive 改为defraud， take the lamp away改为takes back
捷径 是shortcuts 不是short ways
最后一句改为So believe ourselves, and we a...

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第4行 become后面不用to
第2段 When Aladdin was a boy was改为is，后面也全部改为一般现在时
第4段 deceive 改为defraud， take the lamp away改为takes back
捷径 是shortcuts 不是short ways
最后一句改为So believe ourselves, and we are the jinnee of ourselves.或者Believe ourselves because we are the jinnee of ourselves

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