哪位哥哥或姐姐帮我看看我的作业,Once,two young boys wanted to smoke,but they have no money.At last thinking of an idea,they took two cigarettes from father’s packet and went to hide in the garage.Looking around and was sure that there

哪位哥哥或姐姐帮我看看我的作业,Once,two young boys wanted to smoke,but they have no money.At last thinking of an idea,they took two cigarettes from father’s packet and went to hide in the garage.Looking around and was sure that there
哪位哥哥或姐姐帮我看看我的作业,
Once,two young boys wanted to smoke,but they have no money.At last thinking of an idea,they took two cigarettes from father’s packet and went to hide in the garage.Looking around and was sure that there was anyone near the garage.Two boys lit the cigarettes to smoke ,but they coughed terrible because they didn’t know how the cigarette smoked.At exactly that moment,their father was not far to the garage and saw smoke coming from there.So rushed down as quickly as possible so that seeing if fire was caused.Father smiled when he saw boys,he not only wasn’t angry,but offered them cigars.The boys accepted them guiltily and smoked again.Both felt very sick.In fact,cigarettes let them suffer.The boys said confirmedly:we will not smoke at all.
这是根据课文提供的一些单词,按照自己的思路写的一篇小作文,帮我看一下短文中有没有句型错误,或者时态不对的地方,

哪位哥哥或姐姐帮我看看我的作业,Once,two young boys wanted to smoke,but they have no money.At last thinking of an idea,they took two cigarettes from father’s packet and went to hide in the garage.Looking around and was sure that there
其中有不少的错误,我给你改改：
Once upon a time ,two young boys wanted to smoke,but they had no money.At last they got an idea that they took two cigarettes from their father’s packet and hid in the garage.When they two looked around and made sure that there was no one near the garage,they lit the cigarettes.But they coughed terribly because they didn’t know how to smoke.At that moment,their father who was not far from the garage saw the smoke coming from there.So the father rushed as quick as possible to see if fire was caused.But the father smiled when he saw the two boys,he not only wasn’t angry but also offered them cigars.The boys accepted the cigars guiltily and smoked again.Both of the two boys felt very bitter.In fact,cigarettes let them suffer a lot.The boys said confirmedly:we will not smoke at all.
文章错的有点离谱了,我把时态都给改成了过去式（最后一句除外）,句型也给改了一部分,应该可以了……

很多时态错误~

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