大神们帮我改改英语作文吧.我会灰常灰常的感激你们的!Let's talk about the university canteen.Canteen as an important part of the university campus,is responsible for the students to eat every day.A good meal will provide students

大神们帮我改改英语作文吧.我会灰常灰常的感激你们的!Let's talk about the university canteen.Canteen as an important part of the university campus,is responsible for the students to eat every day.A good meal will provide students
大神们帮我改改英语作文吧.我会灰常灰常的感激你们的!
Let's talk about the university canteen.Canteen as an important part of the university campus,is responsible for the students to eat every day.A good meal will provide students with adequate nutrition and energy,so that students have sufficient energy to better each lesson.But if the quality of the food is not safe,it will seriously affect the health of students.The students look forward to good food,but the dream and the reality that there is a gap between.Most school cafeteria food is hard to satisfaction.Not only that,the price of most food unbearable.Many students of poor families have to find cheaper places to eat,but the quality of cheap food cannot be guaranteed.So I hope that the government will increase subsidies to the university canteen,cafeteria should strengthen management,the only way to do that enables students three meals a day to eat well and eat at ease.

大神们帮我改改英语作文吧.我会灰常灰常的感激你们的!Let's talk about the university canteen.Canteen as an important part of the university campus,is responsible for the students to eat every day.A good meal will provide students
1:cafeteria should be strengthened in management
2:the only way to do that enables students three meals a day to eat well and eat at ease.这句话是不通的,唯一的方法（加强食堂管理）能够使学生三餐吃得好吃得放松,完全语句不同,应该改成
Only by this way can students eat well and eat at ease
3：many students from poor famiilies,而不是Many students of poor families
4：你的一个很大的问题就是不自然,硬把一些句式生词套进去,感觉很多句式都不是你自己的词语,是从网上什么地方摘过来.把一些句式生词套进去,虽然生词句式能给文章加分,但是生硬的搬入反而会给评分老师造成不好的影响
多背点短语好句,这样以后写作文才能用的自然恰当

Let's talk about the university canteen.Canteen, as an important part of the university campus, is responsible for the students' meals every day.A good meal will provide students with adequate nutriti...

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Let's talk about the university canteen.Canteen, as an important part of the university campus, is responsible for the students' meals every day.A good meal will provide students with adequate nutrition and energy, so that students have sufficient energy to better each lesson.But if the quality of the food is not safe, it will seriously affect the health of students.The students look forward to good food, but there is a gap between the dream and the reality .Most school cafeteria food is hard to satisfaction.Not only that, the price of most food unbearable.Many students of poor families have to find cheaper places to eat, but the quality of cheap food cannot be guaranteed.So I hope that the government will increase subsidies to the university canteen, cafeteria should strengthen management, only in this way it can enable students to eat well and eat at ease.写英语作文和语文作文不一样，一定要简洁明了，不一定非要用一些见涩难懂的词，只要写得清楚语法句式用的灵活，一样拿高分

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