点评一篇英语作文.一篇初三的作文,内容基本已经写完整了,希望找出哪里有语法错误,和需要修改的地方IdolMy idol is a strong man who names John Cena.He is the WWE's signature players,but also an excellent actor and

点评一篇英语作文.一篇初三的作文,内容基本已经写完整了,希望找出哪里有语法错误,和需要修改的地方IdolMy idol is a strong man who names John Cena.He is the WWE's signature players,but also an excellent actor and
点评一篇英语作文.一篇初三的作文,内容基本已经写完整了,希望找出哪里有语法错误,和需要修改的地方
Idol
My idol is a strong man who names John Cena.He is the WWE's signature players,but also an excellent actor and singer.
He always says,'Never give up'.And he has done everything to comply with this sentence.That's why he did not experience the legendary and illustrious origin,but the tough guy with unremitting efforts have been today.
I think 'Never give up' is the main thing that I can learn from him.
上面是我写的作文,内容不要改变,希望找出不通顺的帮我修改修改,还有语法错误等.把修改的写出来.

点评一篇英语作文.一篇初三的作文,内容基本已经写完整了,希望找出哪里有语法错误,和需要修改的地方IdolMy idol is a strong man who names John Cena.He is the WWE's signature players,but also an excellent actor and
My Idol
My idol is a strong man whose name is John Cena. He is not only the WWE's signature players, but also an excellent actor and singer.
He always says, 'Never give up'. And he has done everything to comply with this saying. He did as he said.That's why the strong guy gained the great achievement thought he didn't have a legendary and illustrious birth.
I think that Never to give up is a good spirit and I should learn from him.

who改成whose, names去掉s,
He is one of WWE's signature players

who改成whose, names去掉s,
He is one of WWE's signature players

1 My idol is a strong man who names John Cena
这里的，who names John Cena
应该是whoes name is John Cena.
2 He is the WWE's signature players
这里的players 应用单数 player.
3He is the WWE's signa...

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1 My idol is a strong man who names John Cena
这里的，who names John Cena
应该是whoes name is John Cena.
2 He is the WWE's signature players
这里的players 应用单数 player.
3He is the WWE's signature players, but also an excellent actor and singer.
一般but also 是和not only 连用的，
He is not only the WWE's signature players, but also an excellent actor and singer
4有一句，看不太懂你想表达什么，
And he has done everything to comply with this sentence. That's why he did not experience the legendary and illustrious origin。
并且他已经做了所有的事情去遵守他的诺言，那也是为什么他没有经历传奇和杰出的起源。
这里的sentence 不太恰当，sentence有判决，命题，句子的意思。可以考虑用promise.
那句话可以这样写：and he has done everything to keep his promise.个人认为这样比较妥当点。
5but the tough guy with unremitting efforts have been today.
这句的语序不太符合英文习惯，
but the tough guy have been today with unremitting efforts .
本人英语水平一般。请见谅。
请其他楼的先生女士尊重我的劳动成果，不要复制答案，谢谢合作！

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He is the WWE's signature players, but also an excellent actor and singer.
这一句，后半句用了but also, 前面应该还要在is后面加上not only吧，并且那个players应该是单数形式，或者是one of the ... players。
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He is the WWE's signature players, but also an excellent actor and singer.
这一句，后半句用了but also, 前面应该还要在is后面加上not only吧，并且那个players应该是单数形式，或者是one of the ... players。
That's why he did not experience the legendary and illustrious origin, but the tough guy with unremitting efforts have been today.
这句我不知道你想要表达什么，但后半句有很明显的语法错误，“with unremitting efforts”是作为定语修饰guy的，today在这句中是状语，所以这半句的主干是but the guy have been, 后面缺少宾语。
从整体来看，这句话前后两次出现“他”，觉得不太好。可以合成一句，或拆成两句。
一句是：That's why the tough and hard-working guy who didn't experience the legendary and illustrious origin have been —— today。

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看起来不错