找一下这篇作文的语法错误 自己写的检查不出来3What interests me most is self-defence because I want to learn me what should I do when I am indanger and some skills when I face to soundrel.What's more,I am very shy,It's acailable fo

找一下这篇作文的语法错误 自己写的检查不出来3What interests me most is self-defence because I want to learn me what should I do when I am indanger and some skills when I face to soundrel.What's more,I am very shy,It's acailable fo
找一下这篇作文的语法错误 自己写的检查不出来3
What interests me most is self-defence because I want to learn me what should I do when I am indanger and some skills when I face to soundrel.
What's more,I am very shy,It's acailable for me to overcame my frighted.
Besides,I am not strong.I think only not this course help me overcame my frighted but also exercise my body to be stronger.
I often considerate that when I am indanger,What I should do.But I on't know.So,I think I'll find answer form this course.
I ant to take part in this course.
说一下哪错了 最好告诉我为什么错了

找一下这篇作文的语法错误 自己写的检查不出来3What interests me most is self-defence because I want to learn me what should I do when I am indanger and some skills when I face to soundrel.What's more,I am very shy,It's acailable fo
,I am very shy,It's acailable for me to overcame my frighted.这句错了,应该是,overcome my fright 因为fright n. 害怕,恐怖, 惊吓.做overcome的宾语, frighted为形容词,害怕的,恐惧的,同样下面的也错了,
because I want to learn me what should I do when I am indanger and some skills when I face to soundrel.错了, because I want to learn what I should do when I am in danger and some skills when I face to soundrel,learn后跟的名词性从句应该用陈述语序.
I often considerate that when I am indanger,What I should do.considerate为形容词adj.体贴的,体谅的；深思熟虑；到；慎重,故而可以改为：I often consider that what...或者I am often considerate that when I am indanger...,这样句子才会有动词做谓语动词
另外,from this course,from不是form
暂时就看出来这些,希望可以帮到你

硬要改语法也行。。 不过你的表达太不地道了就算我把语法都改标准了意思也不大。。 为了给LZ提供一篇流畅的短文 我把整段重新改写如下（不变LZ原文意思）：

The most attractive part about this course is that I can improve my skills to deal with dangerous circumstances b...

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硬要改语法也行。。 不过你的表达太不地道了就算我把语法都改标准了意思也不大。。 为了给LZ提供一篇流畅的短文 我把整段重新改写如下（不变LZ原文意思）：

The most attractive part about this course is that I can improve my skills to deal with dangerous circumstances by taking the course.
【原句最后用soundrel之类的词过于正式过于严重了 没必要，用bad guys什么的就足够了。况且后半句根本就最好删掉 因为face bad guys就是in danger的一种，不需要重复啰嗦】

【What's more,I am very shy,It's acailable for me to overcame my frighted.
Besides,I am not strong.I think only not this course help me overcame my frighted but also exercise my body to be stronger.LZ这几句的逻辑链太vague了 读起来有点莫名其妙。。】猜想LZ是想表达这个意思吧：
Besides, this course can train me to overcome my shyness.
While taking this course, I can also obtain plenty of opportunities to stretch out and keep fit.

【最后简练结尾不要罗嗦】Generally, this course will develop my survival skills, change me into an outgoing person, and help me keep fit. That's why I would like to take this course.

其实LZ写作还行啦 文章结构分明 意思也能传达给读者了><.. 只是下次最好再注意下表达不要重复 、逻辑清晰 、语言简明些就更好了~~
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