05 As is vividly demonstrated in the picture above,there are four children who are playing英语作文,帮我看看有没有语法错误和用词不当的,以及怎样修改,我对你的感激如同滔滔江水,绵绵不绝……As is vividly demonst
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05 As is vividly demonstrated in the picture above,there are four children who are playing英语作文,帮我看看有没有语法错误和用词不当的,以及怎样修改,我对你的感激如同滔滔江水,绵绵不绝……As is vividly demonst
05 As is vividly demonstrated in the picture above,there are four children who are playing
英语作文,帮我看看有没有语法错误和用词不当的,以及怎样修改,我对你的感激如同滔滔江水,绵绵不绝……
As is vividly demonstrated in the picture above,there are four children who are playing “football” of taking care of their aged father.Each of them stands in a different corner of a football field.The eldest son kicked out the father with the other three children guarding their goals.What is conveyed in the picture reflects a reality and is most thought-provoking.
The main purpose of the painter can be interpreted in terms of how to support the old.To begin with,it is universally acknowledged that adult offspring have the obligation to provide for their parents.However,the irrational view of personal enjoyment is the primary cause of the ever-increasing emergence of ill-treats their elders.We should bring home to people ill-treat elderly will be condemned at the bar of public opinion.What’s more,it is well known that to respect the elderly and take care of the young is one of traditional virtues in our country.The action of ill-treat their elders does harm to the healthy development of our society.Therefore,these children should make a deep reflection on their own deeds.
To my way of thinking,counter-measures must be taken immediately so as to converse the trend revealed in the pictures.On the one hand,we should bring home to people the irrational action will be condemned at the bar of public opinion.On the other hand,laws must be established to severely punish those who misbehave and award those who behave well in terms of environmental protection.Only in these ways can we building a harmonious society.
图片好了,我好像没有分了,我看看瞧。)
05 As is vividly demonstrated in the picture above,there are four children who are playing英语作文,帮我看看有没有语法错误和用词不当的,以及怎样修改,我对你的感激如同滔滔江水,绵绵不绝……As is vividly demonst
楼主用词很大,驾驭能力略显不足,也不好说什么
我只能指出几处语法硬伤:
第一段末most如为最高级应加定冠词the most,如果是“大部分”的意思应该用副词mostly.
第二段ill-treat三次用到均应改为ill-treating.
第三段on one hand足矣,没有on the one hand之说.
最后一段倒数第二句environmental protection是指环境保护,为什么养老的话题会牵涉到呼吁立法奖励环境保护?大概是词不达意了.
最后一句building改为build.
如上面生动的图画所示,有四个孩子正在踢足球……
你最好加点分,然后把图也传上来