剑4小作文

篇一：剑4- TEST2雅思小作文批改范例

剑4- TEST2雅思小作文批改范例

以剑桥4-TEST2的Task1为例：

学员习作原稿：

The first chart shows that typical daily demand for electricity in England between winter and summer is quite different. The second chart illustrates what the electricity is used for during the same period in an average English home.

According to the graph, the demand for electricity during typical d

demand for electricity peaks at14 hrs and it bottoms at 23 hrs in one day. And they seem to the same level of 20,000 units of electricity.

In addition, how electricity is used in an average appears to two sectors. One main sectors are both heating rooms and heating water at 52.5%. Another sectors followed by ovens, kettles and washing machines at 17.5%.Also,the electricity is used for lighting, TV and radio at 15% as well as these sectors of vacuum cleaners, food mixers and electric tools.

老师点评：

1)段落安排不合理，两个图的图表作文分两段即可，最好把介绍图表的一个句子放在每一段段首。

2)部分数据失实

3)部分词句表达不地道

4)部分内容衔接有误

5)词汇、句子结构缺乏变化

6)遣词造句缺乏精确度

老师修改稿：

The first chart shows that typical daily demand for electricity in England in winter and summer is quite different. According to the line graph, the demand for electricity during typical days is more than twice as much in winter as it is in summer, peaking at 45,000 units at 10 p.m. in winter while bottoming at 30,000 units at 8 a.m. On the other hand, in summer, the demand for electricity peaks at 20,000 units at 2 p.m. and bottoms at 15,000 units at 9 a.m. in a day. Overall, the bottoming demand in summer days and the peaking demand in summer evenings come one hour later than the corresponding figures in winter.

The pie chart shows that electricity is mainly used in 4 sectors in an average English home. Over a half of electricity (52.5%) is used for

heating rooms or water, which can greatly explain why the electricity use is so high in winter. Another significant proportion of electricity (17.5%) is used by ovens, kettles and washing machines. The electricity used for lighting, TV and radio is at 15%, which is matched by the electricity used by vacuum cleaners, food mixers and electric tools.

(196 words)

篇二：剑4小作文

The chart reveals the percentage of people from different household types living in poverty in Australian in year of 1999. As an overall trend, the proportion of the poor reached 11%, involving almost two millions people.

It was obvious that sole parent families and single no child families accounted for 21% and 19% respectively. However, couples tended to richer than singles. In other word, there were two family types occupied lower scales . The two categories were composed of couples no children 7% and couples with children 12% . Besides, the old presented the same trend between single and couple, of which single aged person made up 6%,while aged couple took up the least percentage of the total, at 4%.

Overall, households of singles,such as single aged person, single no children and sole parent families were generally likely to be poor, on the contrary, couples like aged couple,couple no children and couple with children families were better off on average.

篇三：剑4-8 大作文题目分类总结

剑桥雅思真题大作文题目分类总结（4-8）

Type 1：……→opinion

Q: To what extent do you agree or disagree with the point of the view? Cambridge IELTS 4

TEST 3:

Creative artists should always be given the freedom to express their own ideas (in words, pictures, music or film) in whichever way they wish. There should be government restrictions on what they do.

Cambridge IELTS 5

TEST 1:

Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject.

Cambridge IELTS 6

TEST 1:

Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of society in which they are sold.

Cambridge IELTS 8

TEST 3:

Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution What other measures do you think might be effective?

Type 2：……→fact

Q: Is it positive or negative to society?

None

Type 3：……→opinion/fact

Q: what’s your opinion?

Cambridge IELTS 5

TEST 4:

Research indicates that the characteristics we are born with have much more influence on our personality and development than any experiences we may have in our life.

TEST 4:

Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace. Others think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of whether the

Type 4：……→fact

Q: Do you think advantages over disadvantages?

Cambridge IELTS 4

TEST 1:

of three of the following as media for communicating information. State which you consider to be is the most effective. Comics, books, radio, television, film, theatre

Cambridge IELTS 5

TEST 2:

In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. (此题双方都要讨论，advantages和disadvantages比重一样)

Type 5：Some people think that……. But others think that…….

Q: Discuss the both sides and give your own opinion?

Cambridge IELTS 5

TEST 3:

Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults.

Cambridge IELTS 6

TEST 2:

Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions.

Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair.

TEST 3:

Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behaviors. Others disagree and think that the host country should welcome cultural differences.

Cambridge IELTS 6

TEST 4:

Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing.

Cambridge IELTS 7

TEST 1:

It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician.

Cambridge IELTS 7

TEST 2:

Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment.

Cambridge IELTS 8

TEST 1:

Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this.

Type 6：……→fact→problem

类型

1. Fact+ reason+ solutions Cambridge IELTS 4

TEST 4: In many countries schools have severe problems with student behavior.

Cambridge IELTS 8

TEST 4:

In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing.

2. Fact+ problems (即由fact带来的消极影响)+solutions

None

3. Fact+ reasons+ influences(不是建议，而是对fact进行正负评价)

Cambridge IELTS 8

TEST 2:

Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology.

4. Fact + reasons+ importance(讨论fact的积极影响)

Cambridge IELTS 4

TEST 2:

Happiness is considered very important in life.

Cambridge IELTS 7

TEST 3:

As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual well-being.