2016中考作文开头
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篇一:2016中考作文开头技巧集锦:凤头引蝶 夺人魂魄
2016中考作文开头技巧集锦:凤头引蝶 夺人魂魄
“好的开端是成功的一半”。开头在文章中的作用十分重要。它能提炼中心,完整结构,吸引读者。它能使文章锦上添花,令阅卷者倦处生神。这种说法并不夸张。因此,作文时多花费点时间、多动点脑筋,写个好的开头,是十分必要的。请看来自中考满分作文的精彩开头:
1.落笔入题,总领全篇
例1.小时候,对印在连环画、贺卡上那些“挥着翅膀的孩子——天使”爱得痴迷。那纯洁的,绒棉似的白翅膀是一切美好的象征,它装饰着我儿时的梦。(重庆满分文《白翅膀装饰着我的梦……》开头)
这篇文章一开头就交代自己喜欢白翅膀,并用“它装饰着我儿时的梦”既照应文题,又领起下文。这种开头能给人干脆利落,入题快捷,不枝不蔓的感觉。应为考场作文开头的首选方法。
2.序引题记,醒人耳目
例2.叶子,是不会飞翔的翅膀;翅膀,是落在天上的叶子。(重庆满分文《翅膀,落在天上的叶子》题记)
这个题记采用比喻的方法来揭示“翅膀”和“叶子”的关系。“翅膀”和“叶子”怎么可以划上等于号呢?这个疑问,犹如一个谜团,一下子勾起阅读者的好奇心,只有当你读完全文才知道这是一篇“丑小鸭变成小天鹅”翻版的童话故事,作者用一个落叶代替“丑小鸭”,写他的无悔选择,写他的执著梦想,写他的美好心灵,新颖独到,让人耳目一新。
3.写景烘托,渲染心情
例3.又是炎夏了,开始有知了叫了。(北京满分文《动力来自那双眸子》开头)
这篇文章不落别人窠臼,独辟蹊径,从小处切入,从一双具体可见、可感的“眸子”切入,来写一位数学教师的目光情感的传达,给班上的每一位学生所带来的阳光般的温暖和突飞式的进步。此处开头的自然环境描写,既渲染了特定的气氛,衬托了人物的心情,又推动了故事情节的发展。
4.巧用对比,说明问题
例4.早晨8点刚过,一位怒容满面的妈妈就扯着一个个子高高的男孩推开了张教授办公室的门。一进门,妈妈就开始向张教授数落孩子的不是。而那个男孩似乎满不在乎,总是抬着头看天花板,身体还在不停地晃动着。时不时的还回上一句表示反对。(山东莱芜满分文《其实并不是这样》)
文章开头大肆渲染母亲眼中孩子的“不好”,可到了教授那里,教授反而轻易地就指出了孩子的“优点”,这样的对比,只能说明一点,其实并不是孩子不好,是“母亲”的眼光有问题,教育孩子的思想有问题。
5.反向立意,别出心裁
例5.我是魔鬼,是一个心中住着天使的魔鬼。(山东滨州满分文〈让天使永驻心中〉开头)
文章题目是“让天使永驻心中”,可开头就是一句“我是魔鬼”,让人感觉奇怪。再往下,第个段落的开头句都是“我是魔鬼”,一直到最后,细读才会领略到此反向立意的妙处是在突出“安琪儿”。
6.角度新颖,情理交融
例6.“王蜂一口针,橘子两边分。世间痛恨事,最毒淫妇心。”自从《水浒》一问世,人们便拿此评价其中的人物——潘金莲。这个人物形象成了人们心目中心狠手毒的“淫妇”、“荡妇”的典型。
潘金莲你实在是冤枉啊!(山东莱芜满分文《其实并不是这样》开头)小作者将人们熟悉的《水浒》故事写入作文,读来却不觉重复。此处引用《水浒》开头,巧妙引出议论对象——潘金莲,既显自己的文化底蕴,又能将此与自己的观点形成对比,合情合理。
7.句式工整,含蓄蕴藉
例7.曾经留恋“秦王扫六合,虎视何雄哉”的英雄幸福,曾经追求“采菊东篱下,悠然见南山”的隐士幸福;也曾经探寻“会当凌绝顶,一览众山小”的志士幸福。但是我毕竟是我,我要去采撷最美丽的幸福,来点缀无悔的青春!于是,我乘上幸福专列,开始了寻找幸福的路程。(山东济宁满分文《乘上幸福的列车》开头)文章开头诗文的引用,使文章的语言古雅流畅而充满诗意,意蕴丰腴而耐人寻味。
8.比喻扣题,主旨凸现
例8.每个人降临人世时都没有翅膀,惟有读书才能使生命飞翔。(重庆满分文《读书——生命飞翔的羽翼》开头)
这章的思路相当开阔,一般人很少将读书和“翅膀”话题联系在一起,考生一开头以比喻句“每个人降临人世时都没有翅膀,惟有读书才能使生命飞翔”开启下文,很好地凸现了文章的主旨“读书——生命飞翔的羽翼”。
9.起兴开头,直奔主题
例9.雄鹰拥有翅膀,就能展翅高飞;飞机拥有翅膀,就能翱翔蓝天。我也幻想有一对翅膀,风雨中让我展翅飞翔,没有谁能把我阻挡飞越世界的梦想。(重庆满分文《假如给我一双翅膀》开头)
此开头由雄鹰、飞机起兴,倾诉“我”对梦想的执著之情,为下文描绘那些拥有翅膀的种种理由设置了悬念。
10.排比开头,注入诗韵
例11.云卷云舒,卷舒的是心灵的纯净无暇;雁过雁往,过往的是人性的清姿丽影;花开花落,开落的是灵魂的郁秀芬芳。(山东日照满分文《给我一个懂你的机会》)
作者文笔优美,此开头选取了自然界中几个画面进行描写,用语典押,句式整齐,朗朗上口,富有韵味。
11.一线串珠,珠珠润丰
例11.幸福是什么?(山东济宁满分文《幸福小语》)
文章以“幸福是什么?”开头,独句成段,发人深思,引起下文。下文分别用“司马迁说”“陶潜说”“李太白说”“刘禹锡说”“陈景润说”“林肯说”“甘地说”“我说”来高度概括8个人的幸福观,起到了“万箭攒射”的效果。作者丰厚的积累可见一斑。
12.论坛形式,新奇无比
例12.【主题帖子】幸福是什么?幸福是微笑着的闪着泪光的双眼;是耳边亲切的问候;是孩子们在沙滩上玩耍;是风烛残年的老人携手夕阳;是全家人围成一桌在中秋之夜享受天伦……一千个人对“幸福”就会有一千种诠释,正象一千读者眼中有一千个“哈姆雷特”。(不信请到“幸福”论坛里转一转。)(天津满分文《论坛里的“幸福水”》开头)
此开头从论坛“主题帖子”开始,用设问句引起读者注意,用排比句巧作道理论证,用“一千个人对‘幸福’就会有一千种诠释,正象一千读者眼中有一千个‘哈姆雷特’”概括自己对幸福的观点。新鲜的形式,巧妙的开头,实在是高招!
篇二:2016中考英语作文(开头_结尾_经典句)
中考英语作文
写好作文五要素:要点+结构+逻辑+语法+亮点
1.要点:缺少要点就会扣分。所以要点要做到全,围绕中心。
2.结构:中考最流行的结构就是三段式 “观点——要点——总结”让人一目了然。三段式的第一段:简单明了,开门见山,不超过2句话 第二段:可以分析原因。 第三段:经过第二段的论证,可以得出结论。但请注意,不能完全照抄第一段,要有升华。也可以提出希望和建议等。
3.逻辑:通过使用逻辑词体现文章的思路。
4.语法:语法是硬性的。如单词的使用,时态等要注意。
5.亮点:高级一点的词汇,词组,句型便是我们得到一等文的最有力的绝招。所以一般词汇要限量用。 如何开头
1. “开门见山”式开头
一般来说,文章的开头应尽量做到“开门见山”,即要用简单明了的语言引出文章的话题,使人一开始就能了解文章要说明的内容。
① 对于叙事类的文章,可以在开头把人物、时间、事件和环境交代清楚。如“A Trip to Huangshan(黄山之旅)”的开头可以是:Last month,my family went to Huangshan by train. It took us ten hours to get there. What a long and tiring journey! We were tired but the beautiful scenery excited us。
② 对于论述性的文章,可以在开头处先阐明自己的观点,接着展开进一步的论述。如“The Time and the Money(时间和金钱)”的开头可以是:Most people say that money is more important than time. But I don't think so. First,when money is used up,you can earn it back,but……
2. 回忆性开头
在描述事件或游记类的文章中,采用回忆性的开头往往更能吸引人的眼球。这种类型的开头中通常含有描述自己心情或情绪的词汇,如never forget (永远无法忘记)、 remember (记得)、unforgettable (难以忘怀的)、 exciting(令人激动的)、surprising(令人惊讶的)、sad (难过的)……如“A Trip to Huangshan(黄山之旅)”的开头还以这样写:I will never forget my first trip to Huangshan. 或It was really an unforgettable experience I had。
3. 疑问性开头
在叙事类或论述性的文章中,都可采用疑问型开头,这样既可以吸引阅卷者的注意又容易抓住中心。如“Planting Trees(种树)”的开头可以是:Have you ever planted trees? Don't you think planting trees is…… 再如“Traveling Abroad (出国之旅)”的开头可以是:If you have an opportunity to travel abroad, why not consider Singapore?
4. 倒叙式开头
在有的文章,特别是叙事类的文章中,可以采用倒叙的写作手法,先写出事件的结果,再陈述过程。如“Catching Thieves (捉贼)”的开头可以这样写:I lay in bed in the hospital. I smiled at my friends even though my legs hurt. Do you want to know what happened to me? Let me tell you. It's a …… story。 开头经典句子
1. 不用说…… It goes without saying that … = (It is) needless to say (that) …. = It is obvious that …. 例:不用说早睡早起是值得的。
It goes without saying that it pays to keep early hours.
2. 在各种……之中,…… Among various kinds of …… /= Of all the …, …
例︰在各种运动中我尤其喜欢慢跑。
Among various kinds of sports, I like jogging in particular.
3. 就我的看法……;我认为……
In my opinion, … = To my mind, ….= As far as I am concerned, …= I am of the opinion that ….
例:In my opinion, playing video games not only takes much time but is also harmful to health.
就我的看法打电动玩具既花费时间也有害健康。
4. 随着人口的增加…… With the increase/growth of the population, …
(来自:www.Zw2.cn 爱 作文 网)随着科技的进步…… With the advance of science and technology, …
例:With the rapid development of Taiwan?s economy, a lot of social problems have come to pass. 随着台湾经济的快速发展许多社会问题产生了。
5. ……是必要的 It is necessary (for sb.) to do / that …
……是重要的 It is important / essential (for sb.) to do / that …
……是适当的 It is proper (for sb.) to do / that …
……是紧急的 It is urgent (for sb.) to do / that …
例:It is proper for us to keep the public places clean.
It is proper that we (should) keep the public places clean.
我们应当保持公共场所清洁。
6. As we know, we students are very tired because of study.
7. Just as the saying goes: “Every coin has its two sides”,television has both advantages and disadvantages.正像谚语所说:“任何硬币都有两面”,电视即有优点也有缺点。
8. The problem of ...is important/serious/...to us. Now let me talk something about it.
9. It is said that + 句子 据说… It is reported that + 句子 据报道…
10. We' re often told that ......But is this really the case ?
我们经常被告知......但事实真是这样吗?
11. People used to ......however, things are quite different today.
过去,人们习惯......但,今天的情况有很大的不同。
12. Some people think that ......Others believe that the opposite is true. There is probably some truth in both sides. But we must realize that...
一些人认为......另一些人持相反意见。也许双方的观点都有一定道理。但是我们必须认识到......
13. 每当我听到……我就忍不住感到兴奋。Whenever I hear …, I cannot but feel excited.
每当我做……我就忍不住感到悲伤。 Whenever I do …, I cannot but feel sad.
每当我想到……我就忍不住感到紧张。Whenever I think of …, I cannot but feel nervous.
每当我遭遇……我就忍不住感到害怕。Whenever I meet with …, I cannot but feel frightened.
每当我看到……我就忍不住感到惊讶。Whenever I see …, I cannot but feel surprised.
例:Whenever I think of the clean brook near my home, I cannot but feel sad.
= Every time I think of the clean brook near my home, I cannot help feeling sad.
每当我想到我家附近那一条清澈的小溪我就忍不住感到悲伤。
14. ……the + ~ est + 名词 +(that)+ 主词 + have ever + seen (known/heard/had/read, etc) /
……the most + 形容词 + 名词 +(that)+ 主词 + have ever + seen(known/heard/had/read, etc) Helen is the most beautiful girl that I have ever seen. 海伦是我所看过最美丽的女孩。
Mr. Chang is the kindest teacher that I have ever had. 张老师是我曾经遇到最仁慈的教师。
Yao Ming is the tallest basketball player that I have ever seen. 姚明是我所见过的最高的篮球运动员
Liu Xiang is the most hardworking sportsman that I have ever seen. 刘翔是我所见过的最勤奋的运动员。
15. Nothing is + ~~~ er than to + V/Nothing is + more + 形容词 + than to + V
Nothing is more important than to receive education. 没有比接受教育更重要的事。
Nothing is more important than to protect our environment. 没有什么比环保更重要的事。
Nothing is more important than to gain knowledge. 没有什么比学习知识更重要的事。
16. …….cannot emphasize the importance of……. too much.(再怎么强调...的重要性也不为过。) We cannot emphasize the importance of protecting our eyes too much.
我们再怎么强调保护眼睛的重要性也不为过。
We cannot emphasize the importance of education.
我们再怎么强调教育的重要性也不为过。
17. There is no denying that + S + V ...(不可否认的……)
There is no denying that the qualities of our living have gone from bad to worse.
不可否认的,我们的生活品质已经每况愈下。
There is no denying that Lin Zhiling is the most charming actress I have ever seen.
不可否认,林志玲是我所见过的最有魅力的女演员。
18. It is universally acknowledged that + 句子~~ (全世界都知道……)
It is universally acknowledged that trees are indispensable to us.
全世界都知道树木对我们是不可或缺的。
19. There is no doubt that + 句子~~ (毫无疑问的……)
There is no doubt that our educational system leaves something to be desired.
毫无疑问的我们的教育制度令人不满意。
20. An advantage of ~~~ is that + 句子(……的优点是……)
An advantage of using the solar energy is that it won't create (produce) any pollution.
使用太阳能的优点是它不会制造任何污染。
An advantage of taking exercises is that it can make us keep healthy.
锻炼身体的优点是它可以让我们保持健康。
21. The reason why + 句子 ~~~ is that + 句子(……的原因是……)
The reason why we have to grow trees is that they can provide us with fresh air.
我们必须种树的原因是它们能供应我们新鲜的空气。
22. So + 形容词 + be + 主词 + that + 句子(如此……以致于……)
So precious is time that we can't afford to waste it. 时间是如此珍贵,它经不起我们浪费。
So beautiful is Xi Shi that we all like her. 西施是如此美丽,以致于我们都喜欢她。
23. Adj + as + Subject(主词)+ be, S + V~~~ (虽然……)
Rich as our country is, the qualities of our living are by no means satisfactory.
{by no means = in no way = on no account 一点也不}
虽然我们的国家富有,我们的生活品质绝对令人不满意。
结尾五方式
1. 自然结尾,点明主题
随着文章的结束,文章自然而然地结尾。如“Helping the Policeman (帮助警察)”的结尾可以是:The two children were praised by the police and they felt happy.再如“The Tortoise and the Hare(龟兔赛跑)” 的结尾可以是:When the hare got to the tree, the tortoise had already been there。
2. 首尾呼应,升华主题
在文章的结尾可以用含义较深的话点明主题,深化主题,起到“画龙点睛”的效果。如“I Love My Hometown(我爱家乡)”的结尾可以是:I love my hometown, and I am proud of it.
3. 反问结尾,引起深思
这种方式的结尾虽然形式是问句,但意义却是肯定的,而且具有一定的强调作用,可引起他人的深思。如 “Learning English can give us a lot of pleasure (学英语能为我们带来许多乐趣)” 的结尾可以是:If we learn English well, we can …Don?t you think learning English is great fun?
4. 表达祝愿,阐述愿望
这种方式的结尾常出现在书信或演讲稿的文体中,表示对他人的祝福或对将来的展望等。如“A Letter to the Farmers(给农民们的一封信)”的结尾可以是:I hope the farmers' life will be better and better.
5. 另外,书信的结尾常有以下形式的祝福语:Best wishes; I wish you a merry Christmas and a happy new
year; I wish you have a good time等。
结尾常用句型
1、Taking all these factors into consideration, we naturally come to the conclusion that…
把所有这些因素加以考虑,我们自然会得出结论…
2、Taking into account all these factors, we may reasonably come to the conclusion that…
考虑所有这些因素,我们可能会得出合理的结论…
3、Hence/Therefore, we?d better come to the conclusion that…
因此,我们最好得出这样的结论…
4、There is no doubt that (job-hopping) has its drawbacks as well as merits.
毫无疑问,跳槽有优点也有缺点。
5、All in all, we cannot live without… But at the same time we must try to find out new ways to cope with the problems that would arise.
总之,我们没有…是无法生活的。但同时,我们必须寻求新的解决办法来对付可能出现的新问题。
6、It is high time that we put an end to the (trend)。该是我们停止这一趋势的时候了。
7、It is time to take the advice of … and to put special emphasis on the improvement of …
该是采纳…的建议,并对…的进展给予特殊重视的时候了。
8、Only we in this way can we achieve the goal.只有这样我们才能达到我们的目标。
常用过渡语
1. 表起始的过渡语:first of all, to begin with, in my opinion, according to, so far, as far as等
2. 表时间的过渡语:first, at first, then, later, in the end, finally, afterwards, after that, since then, for the first time, at last, as soon as, the next moment, meanwhile, later on, soon, finally等
3. 表空间的过渡语:on the right/left, to the right/left of, on one side of… on the other side of…, at the foot/top/end of, in the middle/centre of, next to, far from, in front of等
4.表因果的过渡语:for, because of, one reason is that… another reason is that…, thus, so, as a result (of)等
5. 表转折的过渡语:but, yet, however, after all, in fact, while, on the contrary, instead of, unlike, although, otherwise, nevertheless, in spite of, after all等
6. 表列举的过渡语:for example, such as, that is, like, as follows, in other words, and so on等
7. 表推进的过渡语:what?s more, on one hand… on the other hand…, in addition to, as well, still, also, in other words, not only…but also…, besides, furthermore, moreover等
8. 表总结的过渡语:in short, in a word, in general, in brief, in all, on the whole等
常用的名言警句
1. Actions speak louder than words. 事实胜于雄辩
2. A friend in need is a friend indeed. 患难朋友才是真朋友
3. A good beginning is half done. 良好的开端是成功的一半
4. Where there is a will, there is a way. 有志者事竟成
5. All roads lead to Rome. 条条大道通罗马
6. Easier said than done. 说起来容易,做起来难
7. Easy come, easy go. 来得快,去得快
8. Every man has his weak side. 人人都有缺点
9. Failure is the mother of success. 失败是成功之母
10. Look before you leap. 三思而后行
11. Nothing in the world is difficult if you set your mind to it. 世上无难事,只怕有心人.
12. A life without a friend is a life without a sun. 人若无友,就如同生命中没有太阳.
13. All things are difficult before they are easy. 万事开头难.
14. Always prepare for a rainy day. 未雨绸缪.
15. As you sow, so shall you reap. 种瓜得瓜,种豆得豆
16. I might say that success is won by three things: first, effort; second, more effort; third, still more effort.
成功要靠三件事才能赢得:努力,努力,再努力
17. Don?t put off till tomorrow what should be done today. 有事莫推明天.
18. Practice makes perfect.熟能生巧
19. Bad news has wings. 好事不出门,坏事传千里
20. Honesty is the best policy. 做人以诚信为本.
21. You have to believe in yourself. That?s the secret of success. 你必须相信自己,这是成功的关键.
22. Don?t judge a man by his looks. 不可以貌取人.
23. Lost time is never found again. 岁月既往,一去不回。
经典初中英语书面表达范文
1. My Spring Festival
To tell you the truth, I don't like the Spring Festival at all. When I was young I liked it very much,because I could had something tasty to eat during the Spring Festival,and I could enjoy very wonderful TV programmes,too,I also could had much free time during which I could did something I liked to do. I don't like it now, there are many reasons.
Firstly, I can't have a good time during the Festival. Every New Year's Eve something unpleasant often happens. Once I quarreled with my second brother.
Secondly, I can't relax myself during the Festival. I have to do many things, watch so many TV programmes, meet so many people,all these things make me very tired.
Thirdly, spending one Spring Festival means that I become one year older, I don't like to be old. I want to live longer and be young all the time.
说实话,我不喜欢这个春节。当我很年轻的时候喜欢它,因为在春节期间我能有好吃的,我可以享受到非常精彩的电视节目,我也能有空闲时间,我可以做我喜欢做的。我不喜欢现在的工作,有许多原因。
首先,我不能节日期间过得愉快。每年除夕,总是发生一些让我不愉快的事情。有次,我就跟我的二哥吵架了。 其次,我不能在节日期间放松一下。我要做的事情很多,看太多的电视节目,遇见许多人,所有这些都使我很累。 第三,过一个春节意味着我长大了一岁,我不想变老。我想活得更长,变的更年轻。
2. My Best Friend
Linda is my best friend. She is 15 years old. She is a pretty girl with a round face and two big black eyes. She always has a smile on her face. She is taller than I.
Every morning, we go to school together. She studies quite well and she's a top student in ourclass. She is modest in her behaviour. When I have difficulty in English, I always ask her for help. We are both interested in music. At weekends, we join the same hobby group and play the violin together.
We like each other.
琳达是我最好的朋友.她15岁.她是个有着圆脸、两个大大的黑眼睛的漂亮女孩。她总是微笑着。她比我高。 每天早上,我们一起上学。她学习很好,是我们班学习最好的学生之一。她是行为规范的模范。当我有英语上的困难是,我总是向她寻求帮助。我们都对音乐很感兴趣。在周末,我们参加同一个兴趣小组,一起拉小提琴。 我们都互相喜欢对方。
3.My weekend
OK, let me tell you something about my weekend. I am going to do many things and be very busy on the weekend. So I do my homework on Saturday morning. In the afternoon, I am going to do housework with my mother. Because I am a good girl, I am helpful at home. On Sunday morning, I am going to visit my grandparents with my parents. In the afternoon, we are going to the park together. Because there is a kite show. And my grandparents likes making kites. I think, we can see many beautiful kites there. And we are going to buy some beautiful kites, too. Then, we are going to fly the new kites, that?s fun. In the evening, we are going to have a big dinner. We are going to have fish for dinner. Because my grandparents likes eating fish. And my grandma cooks fish well. After dinner, we are going to watch TV together. We are going to be very happy. This is my happy weekend. I like my weekend very much. What about your weekend? Can you tell me
好吧,让我来告诉你有关我周末的一些事情.我在周末将会有很多事情要做并且会很忙.所以我要在周六早上写作业.下午,我要和妈妈一起做家务.因为我是一个好女孩,在家里很有用.周日早上,我要和父母一起去看望祖父母.下午,我们要一起去公园.因为那有个风筝秀.并且我的祖父母喜欢做风筝.我认为,我们会在那看到很多漂亮的风筝.我们的也要买一些漂亮的风筝.然后我们要一起去放新的风筝,那很有趣.晚上,我们会有一个盛大的晚餐.我们会在晚餐上吃鱼.因为我的祖父母喜欢吃鱼.并且我的外婆很会做鱼.晚饭后,我们要一起看电视.我们会非常高兴.这就是我快乐的周末.
篇三:2016年中考考场作文五原则
2016年中考考场作文五原则 第一部分——文章开头切题,并简短
切题,是指文章在文章首段中出现与本文题目紧密相关的字眼,或者说,是文章题目中的关键字要在文章开头部分出现。题目里有困难,那么必须在开头将困难二字加进去。文章的开头,除了切题以外还有二个要求。第一是吸引读者,如果做到这一点,这个分数就可以加一些。第二是引出下文。
开头简洁
考场文章的开头,只要能够切题,能够引出下文和吸引读者,越短越好。
文章开头,短了反而更有优势,有的孩子喜欢在文章开头部分堆字,其实是堆得越多,往往越失败。反而让人觉得主题不明确,存在一句话回绕着说、抒情过多、铺垫过长等问题。第二部分——引出主要人物、事件或话题
如果是记叙文,用来简洁地引出主要人物或事件,如果是话题作文,需要亮明观点的。从这两个角度来讲,第二环节在文章里面最多最多起到一个作用,一般情况是过渡或者是铺垫的作用,而且是不能展开的铺垫,只用来交待相关背景、原由或人物上场。
很多写作能力好的学生,在第二个环节失去了太多分数。往往将前期的铺垫要写到第二页,第三页,还没切入到重点。过渡的太慢,展开的太细。而这个部分内容,只有四个字就够了:交待清楚。越简洁明了越好。
第三部分——全文重点,进行具体描写(或要求有具体事例)
考场作文的第三部分,是全文的重点部分,在亲情友情或成长经历类作文中,第三部分都要通过具体的描写来突出中心,而在话题作文中,通常第三部分需要安排具体的事例,来表现中心。
第四部分:让文章内容变的更丰富,主题更鲜明
通过材料的搭配或表现手法的使用,目的是通过两方面来加以实现:
(1).通过材料的搭配,让文章内容变得更丰富。具体有四个办法,分别为对比、衬托、铺垫或照应,这个是给我们增分数的。比如说写成长经历类作文,特别适合用对比,比如写自己在某件事发生之前,一个十分懦弱的人,通过那件事使我变得更加勇敢。
(2)通过运用表现手法,突出人物形象或主题,比如写令人难忘的一瞬间,一件事,一个人的时候,要把那最难忘的一瞬间展开,把它展开并且加以突出,这时适合用渲染或铺垫的表现手法。
第五部分——结尾独立成段,简明点题
第五部分,它主要指文章的最后一段,要求单独成段,用来点明中心,点明中心的时候需要注意三方面的问题:
第一、集中,是指要把文章的中心集中地表现出来,让阅卷的老师迅速地在文章结尾处看到文章的所要表达的思想情感,防止把文章的主题散在很长的一段话中。
第二、明确,有个文章的结尾说“从他身上感受到了一种美好的品质。“这个文章的结尾在于,它只是笼统地说感受到了“一种美好的品质”,但这种美好的品质指的是什么,并没有明确地点出来,使其变得更加具体明确,如“我从他身上感受到了一种美好的品质——坚持。”
第三、严谨,有的同学整篇作文都写得很好,就是因为最后一段中点题时不严谨,使得作文跑题了。
比如有个孩子文章中写到了两件事,一件事写了他的可爱,另一件事是突出这个人的认真。在文章结尾处,他写道“他是我遇到所有的人中对最认真、最谦虚,也是最可爱的人。”也就是加了“谦虚”两个字,却在文章中没有与“可爱”相关的内容,便可以判定为跑题。
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