Some people think students should learn more practical courses like computer,but others think they should learn more about theoretical courses like geography and mathematics.Discuss both views and give your opinion.Today,what type of courses should s

Some people think students should learn more practical courses like computer,but others think they should learn more about theoretical courses like geography and mathematics.Discuss both views and give your opinion.Today,what type of courses should s
Some people think students should learn more practical courses like computer,but others think they should learn more about theoretical courses like geography and mathematics.Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Today,what type of courses should students learn become a hot-debated topic.Some people believe that students only need to learn practical courses while others hold the opinion that they also need to learn theoretical courses,for example,geography and math
The idea that learning practical courses is sufficient for today’s students is probably owing to the fast speed of development.Those people think that students’ only task is to handle practical knowledge so that it will be easy for them to do their jobs when they graduate.Therefore,they can do better work and have higher pay.
However,someone say that students need to learn theoretical courses such as geography and math.They may think that,in this way,students can have expanded horizons.Also,if they learn those subjects well,they tend to solve practical problem easily.
For me,I support the idea that students have the need to learn theoretical courses .for one reason; those subjects are the foundation of other courses.Take math for example,many pupils who are doing well in computer always good at math.For another reason,learning more courses can expand children’s horizons; their brains contain variety knowledge which will benefit their future life.People,who learn geography well,not only have the knowledge of the earth but also can recognize the roads accurately in unfamiliar places.Finally,having theoretical courses contribute to the development of science.It is interesting to find that some children who are interested in learning math or geography finally become famous scientists.So having theoretical courses provide students the opportunity to find their hobbies.
In conclusion,no matter practical courses or theoretical courses are of the same importance.I suggest students should learn theoretical ones in high school as well as some easy practical courses,and deeply study their majors when they come to universities or colleges.

Some people think students should learn more practical courses like computer,but others think they should learn more about theoretical courses like geography and mathematics.Discuss both views and give your opinion.Today,what type of courses should s
注意语法（我也要过雅思我也要注意）.首先第一段中应该用types,而且根据从句语法应该是students should learn（自己翻书）,这个指的是学生们应该学的.而你的后面又是become,如果真的是type,那也应该是becomes,看来你要多多复习主谓一致.小心,别因为这些到时候是你送别人出国而不是别人送你出国.if从句如果表示将来,后面那个要加上will.注意你文章中的大小写,有错.many pupils who do well应该是正确的,这个表示一般现在时,是一种普遍的情况.后面应该是are,因为你用的是定语从句,先行词是pupils,也就是pupils are always good at Math.个人感觉后面应该是a variety of表示多种多样的.后面的having ther.表示的是单数意思,指的是上什么什么课,不能只看后面的courses就用复数（强烈建议看主谓一致）.貌似你的文章中标点符号有错,注意.那个provide也是.笔者觉得你在分词这一块学的不错,多多加油,你是有一定英语基础的,别因为这些丢分,如果我有说错的或者没有说出来的请谅解,
其他几位说的你也请看看,我们是真心帮人,不是那些喷子看到什么就乱喷.

总体来讲楼主的发挥四平八稳，高分词汇和句式变化少了点
论证的结构要改一下，主要是讨论，自己的观点可以少写点。
不难发现你的观点完全可以上移到论证部分
麻烦楼主等等，我正在认真批改，稍后上传好的，谢谢你啦！我第一次凭自己感觉乱写写是6分，第二次看了些范文还有小姨的那本书之后只有5分了。。。苦恼中。。。在你另一个贴里回复了...

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总体来讲楼主的发挥四平八稳，高分词汇和句式变化少了点
论证的结构要改一下，主要是讨论，自己的观点可以少写点。
不难发现你的观点完全可以上移到论证部分
麻烦楼主等等，我正在认真批改，稍后上传

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I think there are no response to any part of the question and it's difficult to identify any relevant point of view. You should try to state a clear position at the outset first, and maintain it to the end rather than write in a way to be so repeative and cirular both between and within paragraphs. try again

同意楼上的看法，是有些话说得重复了。还是有些小的语法错误，或者说不符合外国人的阅读习惯。但作文的结构，整体框架搭得不错了，也运用了很多连词。有个词汇上的小建议：你用了4次的can在作文中，这个词个人觉得用多了就显得不够力量，换成be able to, be capable of 等会好些。For example: Therefore, they can do better work and hav...

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同意楼上的看法，是有些话说得重复了。还是有些小的语法错误，或者说不符合外国人的阅读习惯。但作文的结构，整体框架搭得不错了，也运用了很多连词。有个词汇上的小建议：你用了4次的can在作文中，这个词个人觉得用多了就显得不够力量，换成be able to, be capable of 等会好些。For example: Therefore, they can do better work and have higher pay. 改成：They will be able to get a higher position and a bigger pay check.
还有 It is interesting to find that some children who are interested in learning math or geography finally become famous scientists 两个interest有些重复, 换成 It is exciting//encouraging to find that some children who are interested in//are in love with//are fascinated by// learning math or geography finally become famous scientists
还是有空间可以提升词汇的运用的，句式改起来会麻烦些，整篇文章会动不少。

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