healthy is very important for everyone ,but nowbody more and more peole are in poor health .so we should struggle to keep health.fist:we should get up early and sleep early eveyday .then :we should eat more vegetables and fruits,food has a great effe

healthy is very important for everyone ,but nowbody more and more peole are in poor health .so we should struggle to keep health.fist:we should get up early and sleep early eveyday .then :we should eat more vegetables and fruits,food has a great effe
healthy is very important for everyone ,but nowbody more and more peole are in poor health .so we should struggle to keep health.
fist:we should get up early and sleep early eveyday .then :we should eat more vegetables and fruits,food has a great effect on
our health .finally we should remind of myself to play sports everyday
Anyhow health is the most precous gift that man can ever have

healthy is very important for everyone ,but nowbody more and more peole are in poor health .so we should struggle to keep health.fist:we should get up early and sleep early eveyday .then :we should eat more vegetables and fruits,food has a great effe
Health is very important for everyone but nowadays more and more people are not healthy enough,so we should struggle for good health.
Firstly,we should get up early and sleep early everyday,then we should eat more vegetables,fruits and food which benefits our body.Finally,we should remind ourselves to play sports everyday.
Anyway,health is most precious gift that a man can ever have.
原来的错误我已经帮你订正了,但不确定啊.
我尽力了~

nowbody没有这个单词，你想写的可能是nobody，他的意思是没有人，你应该写的是now，是现在的意思。fist写错了，应该是frist

1 开头那个要用名词 health
2 nowbody没有这个词 用today就行了
3 第二行最后的health 应改为healthy
4 倒2行的的myself 应改为ourselves
5 precous拼写错误 是precious
6 fist 拼写错误 ，应该是first
只找出6个 肯定还有错 希望其他人找出来

Health is so important that everyone should pay attention on it. But nowadays more and more people are not healthy enough, so we should struggle for keeping healthy.
Firstly, we should get up ear...

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Health is so important that everyone should pay attention on it. But nowadays more and more people are not healthy enough, so we should struggle for keeping healthy.
Firstly, we should get up early and sleep early everyday. Then we should eat more vegetables, fruits and the food which benefits our body. What's more, we should remind ourselves to do exercise everyday.
Anyway, health is the most precious gift that a man can ever have.
首先, 尽量不要用very, 用其他的词换掉 very .

然后...我觉得你最多是初二的学生.- -
以后好好学英语啊!! 有很多语法问题!
最后,我认为我给你的这篇文章能在你们班上是范文,
如果老师表扬你了,你要告诉我.
还有,甚至标点你都要和我给你的文章一样,
至于原因等你 语法学到一定程度了你就知道了.
我这里就不告诉你了.

另外, 你要加油啊! 祝你英语进步!

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