求高手修改英语六级作文英语太烂,很不顺,呵呵,I have a really interesting job in machuya where is in shibuya.It is a part-time job and I work from 19:00~23:00.one week third.What about my job?\x05The customer buys a ticket in a machi

求高手修改英语六级作文英语太烂,很不顺,呵呵,I have a really interesting job in machuya where is in shibuya.It is a part-time job and I work from 19:00~23:00.one week third.What about my job?\x05The customer buys a ticket in a machi
求高手修改英语六级作文
英语太烂,很不顺,呵呵,
I have a really interesting job in machuya where is in shibuya.
It is a part-time job and I work from 19:00~23:00.one week
third.What about my job?
\x05The customer buys a ticket in a machine and gives it to me.I
read the name of the cook which wrote in the ticket .other
staff cooks the cook.I provide the cook to the customer.
Because there are so much people(they play,shopping,work in here)
in shibuya .so my shop is Very busy .after job I really feel tried.but
When I work I feel happy.It is a nice job.

求高手修改英语六级作文英语太烂,很不顺,呵呵,I have a really interesting job in machuya where is in shibuya.It is a part-time job and I work from 19:00~23:00.one week third.What about my job?\x05The customer buys a ticket in a machi
1、I have a really interesting job in machuya where is in shibuya.改为I really have an interesting job in machuya ,shibuya.
2、It is a part-time job and I work from 19:00~23:00.one week
third.改为It is a part-time job and I work from 19:00~23:00 third a week
3、 I read the name of the cook which wrote in the ticket ,read改为check,检查,检验; which wrote改为which is written注意被动语态；
4、other staff cooks the cook.改为Other staffs cook the cook.;语法是应该这样改,但是这句话有点不通顺,需要在修改.
5、the customer加复数s,the customers
6、Because there are so much people,把so改为too,如果用so much一般情况下接下来有that引导从句；
7、they play,shopping,work in here；shopping改为shop,play、shop、work几个词语并列,最好在work前加and；把in去掉,here there where等不能用介词.
8、I really feel tried,tried拼写有错误,改为tired
9、but When I work I feel happy.改为.However,when I am working,I feel happy.

I have a really interesting job at machuya in shibuya.
It's a part-time job and work three days a week from 19:00 to 23:00 . I'll tell you something about my job。
The diners order their m...

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I have a really interesting job at machuya in shibuya.
It's a part-time job and work three days a week from 19:00 to 23:00 . I'll tell you something about my job。
The diners order their meals and pay the bill .Then they get a meal items typed from a machine .They give it to me and I read aloud the meal they have ordered to the cook.
The cooking staff prepare the meal and when ready, I serve the meal to the diners. Because there are so many people playing,shopping and working in shibuya , my shop is very busy .After work, I feel really tried out .However, when I work I feel happy. It is a nice job and I love it!

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我看了一下，改后是这样的：I really have a interesting job in machuya ,shibuya.It's a part-time job and I work from 19:00 to 23:00.What is the content of my work?That's is:
The customers buy a ticket in a...

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我看了一下，改后是这样的：I really have a interesting job in machuya ,shibuya.It's a part-time job and I work from 19:00 to 23:00.What is the content of my work?That's is:
The customers buy a ticket in a machine and give it to me. I read the name of the cook (这里什么意思啊？很费解) which wrote in the ticket .other staff cooks the cook（其他工作人员会做饭的厨师？不懂啊！）. I provide the cook to the customers. As there are so many people(they play,shopping,work in here) in shibuya , my shop is very busy .I really feel tried after closed .But While I am working ,I feel happy. It is a nice job.
我的水平也有限，只能改成这样！希望你满意哦！

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I have a really interesting job in machuya where is in shibuya.
It is a part-time job and I work from 19:00~23:00.one week
third（three times a week）. What about my job?
The customer(s) ...

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I have a really interesting job in machuya where is in shibuya.
It is a part-time job and I work from 19:00~23:00.one week
third（three times a week）. What about my job?
The customer(s) buy a ticket in a machine and give it to me. I
read the name of the cook which wrote(wrotten) in the ticket .other
staff(s) cook the cook(meal). I provide the cook (take the meal) to the customer(s).
Because there are so much people(they play,shopping,work in here)
in shibuya . so my(our)shop is Very busy .I really feel(felt) tried(tired) after job .but
When I work I feel happy. It is a nice job.
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