短文改错10处Yesterday when I put forward my parents the plan that I would take a part-time job during the holiday ,they were strong against me .In his opinion,the only thing Ishould do now is to study hard .Then Ican be able to be admitting to a

短文改错10处Yesterday when I put forward my parents the plan that I would take a part-time job during the holiday ,they were strong against me .In his opinion,the only thing Ishould do now is to study hard .Then Ican be able to be admitting to a
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Yesterday when I put forward my parents the plan that I would take a part-time job during the holiday ,they were strong against me .In his opinion,the only thing Ishould do now is to study hard .Then Ican be able to be admitting to a dood university .
However ,I don't agree on them .As a high school student,by take a part-time job Ican learn that I can't in class .I will know how to get along with ohers,and of course ,to earn some money as well.I blieve I can understand the value of the money much better through my own experience.

短文改错10处Yesterday when I put forward my parents the plan that I would take a part-time job during the holiday ,they were strong against me .In his opinion,the only thing Ishould do now is to study hard .Then Ican be able to be admitting to a
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Yesterday when I put forward (加入to) my parents the plan that I would take a part-time job during the holiday,they were (strongly) against me.In (their) opinion,the only thing I should do now is to study hard .Then I (will) be able to be (admitted) to a good university .
However,I don't agree (with) them.As a high school student,by (taking) a part-time job I can learn (what) I can't (加入learn) in class.I will know how to get along with others,and of course ,to earn some money as well.I believe I can understand the value of (去掉the) money much better through my own experience

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